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your name

I heard your name the other day,
Got kinda sad didn’t know what to say.
They kept talking bout you,
I didn’t know what to do so I went away.
I drove by your house just last night,
I saw your car and just didn’t feel right.
I drove away in a different mood,
This depression trying to fight.

Please tell me what you think

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  • kcisapoet
    February 2, 2007

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    great job

    This piece is great. The way you wrote it is so informal that you can feel the emotion coming through here, even though you haven't expressed that many. I love it, and great job. Keep writing


  • autumns rising
    January 28, 2007
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    Greatness

    I like the rhyme. its really good


  • Jeb
    January 27, 2007
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    fuckin' A

    This is excellent! You expressed one hell of alot in a very few words. Job well done. It makes me wonder who it was about. The way you wrote it was cool because I could almost feel like I was living it. Kudos to you!