Ink on paper
The gentle light of the taper
Words scrawled in haste
By one considered half-caste
Empty to those unknown
But soul is shown
His shattered heart laid bare
Her wishes that he was there
And the ink continues to flow
Words of long ago
Fear, pain, and heartbreak
It's almost too much to take
A world full of dreams
A throat torn by screams
His heart begins to stir
He wishes he could comfort her
The clicking of the keys
Empty as the seven seas
But for one who knows how to look
And be emotionally shook
By how love truly conquers all
And we never truly fall
She knocks hesitantly
And is greeted passionately
He whispers softly
"I love you"
A contest entry
- ~Picture Inspired Contest 20 Or Less Awards~ by Frozentearz.
525 points, ended February 5, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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enchanting
this write reminds me of homer and his odyssey. here, the poet travels the seven seas in the poem and takes the reader into his mind of adventure by making out an emotional journey wrought with sadness, pain, and gladness. i was enchanted by this write, because it was like the stories in english class coming alive. wanna be ap friends? i'm new.
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A very good description of how various thought processes weave their way from our mind to the paper. Lovely tight rhyme structure and faultless flow. Truly deserving the golden goblet.
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Brilliant piece
Tremendous flow to this piece of great writing here. I really enjoyed reading that. That was superb. Wonderful writing, indeed. Keep writing.
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soo good lover it baby
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beautiful...deserves the trophy..congratulations
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awsome poem!! this is amazing great write!!!
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beautiful
Great work. i really liked it.
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I am so happy you have won a gold with this one you definitely deserved the trophy with the great alliteration and rhyme and meter that you have thrown into this one!!!
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It was a great write. I loved it.
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You made me cry.
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you got gold woop you got gold woop this is a really good wrtie i lovers it i love the flow and the imergary all ways good
lovers it well done on the turn out.
a write worth the read and one for you to be proud of
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I love this one! It is bouncy... with a great flow, perfect rhymes and message. Thanks for entering and best wishes in the contest!
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GREAT!
I love this...i read it earlier but it was better the second time....your lucky to be in love...sigh
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You'll find the person for you Liz, it takes patience, just be yourself and not who society tries to make you be.
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This was a great tale that the picture has inspired within you, and I thank you for sharing your thoughts
I loved this line "The getle light of the taper" but perhaps you meant gentle
Thanks for sharing warm thoughts
Frozentearz -
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Thank you, that is what I meant, guess I missed the 'n' key.
~Corey~
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What a unique take on the pic! I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for entering and best wishes in the contest. I especially liked the second stanza...
And the ink continues to flow,
words of long ago...
very nice! Thanks for sharing and best wishes to you,
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Thank you.
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