silenced in the dark -
seeking for the light
beyond the horizon
kissing away the innocence
of such a fragile figure -
for that no one
truly understood
lying on the cold tile
next to shivering soul -
that is truly vanished
no harm
has ever reached such
a precious and smooth creature -
yet the shot went through
piercing tears
stretch out for comfort -
as blood seep into puddles
evil never lurked inside -
except when the sleek metal
pressed against the skull
and killed off a pure structure
it's always unexpected -
searching with unknown questions
only to receive anonymous answers
guess that is to happen
when only the good die young
Author notes
..::Not the best - But I tried::..
Enjoy!
(( Title Used : Only The Good Die Young ))
+Option Number Six+
A contest entry
- Only The Good Die Young by Brugge is dood.
450 points, ended February 2, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
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380 points, ended August 22, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
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650 points, ended September 4, 2008, 57 entries
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not the best I know...what do you think??
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Very good poem
I really like it...However it needs some punctuation.
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wow great write very well deserved trophies thanks for sharing congrats
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Its tone is clear. And thought is constant. Good job, and good luck. I didnt find anything i thought was awkward but nothing JUMPED out at me as amazing either. I liked the poem. Good Luck!
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thanks for entering, i really liked this and it really had a kind of sadness about it, like declaring that the good do die young.
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wow... this is super, and really did deserve what it got! how couldn't you know missy
this rocked, just so sad and it didn't openly rhyme, but it seemed lik eti did cause the flow was so good
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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