“Now, yore mad as hell, here, tellin’ me how you been disrespected.
Seems yore beau done popped the question an’ it weren’t how you expected.
He’s done told ya, "I got half a mind to take you for my wife,
an’ half a mind t’love you for the rest of yore sweet life!"
“Well, Daughter-mine, remember, that’s a cowboy that you picked,
an we both know how many times he’s had his fool head kicked!
The boy ain’t got but half a brain, so maybe I should mention,
If he’s got half a mind t’love you… Gal, you got his full attention!”
Author notes
Nothin' to add.
Written August 2nd, 2002
A contest entry
- Let's Keep it Country by davidwright.
600 points, ended June 5, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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That's great "you got his full attention." Thanks for your entry. David Wright
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The contest is closed for judging which may take two or three days. My thanks to each of you for your great entry. Happy trails.
David Wrigh -
Guffaw!!!
Priceless... Yep - this 'un wuz shore penned by sum broken down ole redneck - Thanks for the laughs buddy
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I liked this alot. Great use of dialect.
An all around creative piece. Nicely done.
~Jess -
read your poem and was curious have youo ever been to a little town called Maple Creek Saskatchewan? If you haven't you should look into the Cowboy Poetry contests they have there. It is a three day event during which cowboys are challenged to go up and read/perform their poetry in front of the audience. If you have never been there you should go and check it out because it is very interesting and your poetry would fit in very well.
It is in Canada though here is the Maple Creek website address -- nothing much on the contest but they have a phone number
September
17 to 19 - Maple Creek's 10th Annual Cowboy Poetry Gathering. Pickin', singin', recitin', western art and gear, beef banquet, western designer fashion show, dancin'
Phone: (306) 662-2434 or 662-3332
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wehay, boom boom.
I was expecting a million pound offer somewhere:)
Great little read. -
OUTSTANDING
You are definately a skilled poet.
You inspire me to continue to write.
THIS PIECE REALLY MADE ME SMILE!
THANKS! -
FUN, FUN, FUN!!!!!
You made my bowl of jello belly shiver and quake. -
I like it! Love the story in it.Love the dialect.Very original.And seems from the cowboys I do know, which are few, it seems fitting.....lol.All together a very nice piece of work!
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LOL
Precious! I loved this!
Sounds like something my husband would come up with to say to our oldest daughter...lol
~Pamela -
hahaha Very funny! Lots of fun with this one! Very enjoyable read. I was gonna tell ya bout a few typos. But then I realized that old southern drawl~ you were using.
Good work! -
lol this was hilarious seriously the last two lines cracked me up - it has that genuine drawl and down-to-earth tone hehe
Ness
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Wow, I came in from the contest entry you submitted. This is great, I absolutely love the drawl you give the characters that you introduce your readers too. A true cowboy, I'm so amazed with these last two writes I've read. They are just wonderful!
-Angel aka WoundedAngel.
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Darn... now that was good.
This is the first of your work I've read and I'm glad I did..
I love cowboy humor and this was pretty good.
I think I'll read a few more..
Pat -
honestly, I took one look at the page and two things jumped out: the dialect and the format. I figured I'd give it a try though, because it's by you. so I read it, and guess what? you pulled it off. congratulations.
-Moonrider -
great difference in the story telling here...i like the accents and how at least i got a sort of moral lesson from it...
keep up the good work...
peace
chris -
ain't never been to neither of them places, there, BB. Where I'm from, it'd be more like a 'ride-by'.
But glad you got a chuckle! Come again anytime. -
funny stuff!
hahaha! lol i luved that...its was so creative...and planned...my poems are wing-it-rhying...like drive buys in the ghetto...urs are like...drive buys in a rich town...its all planned...in the ghetto...it's just 'hey...weren't we supposed to get mad at him for sumthin?" "maybe" "anyone birng a gun" "ive got some eggs" "allright...but try to spell a bad word with them" sorry...gibbering...great poem!
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