There she lays, so quiet and peaceful
Her breathing faint and continuing to decrease
Now a mere lost soul, soon to be released
Lifted away to somewhere, some day
Back to the time when everything was okay
She seems just so far away today
He lays her down to sleep, she's so lovely
Little hands so white and pale, barely there
Blue underneath her nails, sleeping beauty
Author notes
I chose the option about a song you currently are in love with. There is a part in the song Last Kiss Goodbye by Lordi that inspired this poem. Hope you like the poem, and good luck to all,
Cassie
A contest entry
- "I Never Win Contest!" by kennybaby05.
380 points, ended January 23, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
^_^ Tell me what you think of it ^_^
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This was a better version of sleeping beauty short and beautifully penned, It show how talented of a poet you really are and how more people should be reading and commenting your work I will definately be reading more of your work in the future, And aplauding it as well, Thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your work, And for sharing your work with all of us here on ap...
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nice job, but you might want to check ur spelling (like; continueing). But don't worry, I'm bad at grammar and such. Just make sure you've got everything good. I'll add a final comment come close to judgement day.
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I edited the word continuing but I couldn't find any other typos really. Sorry. hope you like anyways. ^_^
Cassie
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