He digs a blade into his skin
Realeasing the pain
that comes from within
An inch to deep is all it would take
Is it worth makeing
That fatal mistake?
He'll hit the wall
To make a bloody fist
Plunge some glass into his wrist
Another scar now haunts his skin
Does he not feel the blade
sinking in?
He pushes his feelings deeper inside
'Its me that loves you,
You cannot hide!'
How do i help you realise the pain?
Talk with your voice
Not your wounds again.
Your body bleeding you want me to see?
You may as well stick
Your blade into me!
Its not only you
who's body have bled
Look at the invisible blood i've shed
You die?, then i die! wait and see
meet u on the other side
'cuz i need you with me
See you in heaven
Is that what it'll take?
If you make that fatal mistake.
Author notes
This is the first poem i have written about a difficult time i been going through lately.
A contest entry
- I AM CUT by darkalesyse.
650 points, ended April 9, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
all comments welcome please
Comments
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I quite enjoy the perspective you've put into this piece, Not many people can take the time to see how what we do to ourselves effects the ones we love, this piece might make some stop and think and that can be more than enough in some situations amazing write dear very well done
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Very well written
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Amazing
ahh this is amazing! it aslo relates alot to me and my ex lover/best friend... we used to always say how if she died then i'd be right their with her in heaven or wherever and vice versa....
amazing poem!
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Another good right. Good job
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there are times when you learn to live!
i guess these are times where you have to outlive!!!
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Wow sounds like a very difficult time. It hurts to see your friends and family doing stuff like this (half my friends have enough issues that they think this is the only relief) but sometimes you can't really do anything. Great write. You are really good at bringing out the meaning behind your words and the descriptions that are there!
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A horrible way to feel that it is the only way you can be heard...very well written and strong...keep writing and letting go, you have found a wonderful outlet in writing and you do it well...
Best to you!
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Very nice!
"Talk with your voice
Not your wounds again."
Those two lines alone sent shivers down my spine. I know that when I had this addiction, i couldn't talk to anyone. I had completely shut down from love, human contact, speaking wasn't a must. The hardest thing to do was to talk, eswpecailly about what was going on with me. I couldn't understand it, so i figured no one else would, so i mentally shut myself down. Thanks for entering. Great write and good luck!
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Thankyou so much for your comment. What you said is so true i completly understand what u mean thankyou x
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wow this is really nice... hate to say it but i've actually had quite a few people say this kind of thing to me... >_> been through quite a lot of that myself.
nice piece.
ps. thanks for your comment earlier ^^
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Talent? lol. this was all very true to me thats why i find it easy to write about. thanks so much for your review. it means alot to me. x
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wow
amazing!
truly amazing!
great choice of words, this is really well written.
i admire your talent
BRAVO!
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Good
Powerful! the words are stong, they hit you straight away. Well written.
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Wow.
It was very powerful. Nice choice of words and the rythm flows pretty well.
Nice job!
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This is a very strong and powerful write. Showing that the pain of another affects those around us. When one hurts...we hurt. Sometimes though we dont always know what to say to get the help we need. Afraid that noone will hear us or understand. Sometimes just sometimes you might be surprised what you may find if you speak to someone.
This has to be one of the most mind blowing lines in this write..or at least to me...
Its not only you
who's body have bled
Look at the invisible blood i've shed
This is so very true in many aspects of life.
There are some spelling and or grammar errors..for example the stanza above should read ..second line..who's body has shed...
This is a very good piece. Especially for your first. Keep writing for it is theraputic...why I write it becomes your voice to speak out what you hold inside.
I wish you well and hope that you find peace ...in this world. Best of luck to you fellow poet..if ever in need of someone to speak to...leave me a message will be glad to listen and help if I can.
Dawn
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I love it! This is such a good poem!
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I love it!
I feel a lot of the same feelings! Your poem is so good! Make more! I could really lear how to write better poems from this!
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thankyou for the 3 applauses! im suprised people think this is good. i would love to write more but i just came out with this one day! if u can help me write in different styles, i would appreciate any tips. thanks again xx
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ouch!!!`
now i am worried about you. really. i wrote the poem you just read for a contest (pic inspired) but this is from what you are going through. suicide is never an option for me now. when one does this, those left behind do not ever recover completely. i know first hand. 35 months later, i am still struggling with the guilt and the feelings of failure that i have because someone i loved very much jumped in front of a train. therapy helps but not quickly.
i hope you have someone to talk to. viyanna rosemarie
i am not sure if i should applaus or not. you wrote this well but the feelings stink.... -
you said i had alot of spelling mistakes? please can u correct me on these if and when you got time. thanks x
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thankyou so much for your thought on my poem. It means alot to me that some of you think its a half-decent piece of work. This poem just came out 1 night when i was going through a particularly bad time, since then i may aswell call it writters block lol. I know alot of people can only write when they are going through deep emotions and it seems im one of them lol. As i havnt used this site alot i am not sure how to get to ur poems but will try in a bit. once again i am so pleased you liked my poem. Thankyou xxx.
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AWESOME
i love this! i can relate...
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thanks for the applauses on my poem. i cant believe u think its awesome. Like i said this poem just came out i have tryed to write further but dont seem to be able to. Any tips on different styles woud be appreciate.x. thanks again x
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wow, I must say I really like this. It reminds me of the poetry I first wrote. I was very dark in my writing thought you write a lot better than I did. It flows well and seems harsh, full of emotion and you rhymed brilliantly. Fantastic work. I really like this one and can't wait for more of your writes. It's saddening that this is a personal poem to you. I hope things are okay with you
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Really niiice. The emotions and sadness seem to be seeping out from the words, like blood staining the page. Welcome to AP, this is a wonderful starting piece and i look forward to reading more beautiful pieces.
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Very nice. I love the way you showed the hurting that someone else's pain can cause; I think many people are forced to suffer because of self destructive friends.
Lovely <3
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Thank you for entering this in my contest!
im sorry about this time your going through.
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Amy86
I think you do well, with it being your first time and all, but you know what keep it up, and the more you proceed the better....huh?
Glad that you asked me to view this....now I will definately be looking for more.
Take care!
Ephiphany
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thanks for your opinion, i hope i am able to write more poems who knows lol
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I like the rhyme scheme, and your writing style is a lot like mine, that's why I like this. Has a nice flow too. I think it's awesome for your first. Keep writing from within.
See you around the deep end
moment liver
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omg!!!!!
this is unbelievable
i've been there done that and this says it all..
bravo..this is unbelievable
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thankyou
It means alot that you like my poem as i wernt sure if it was any good it just sort of came out the other night when i was having a particularly bad time with my boyfriends harming. I would love to have wrote more but its not always easy putting feelings into words. I have read alot of poems about self harm but none from the familys point of view i was trying to show just how much it effects the people around you. Thanks again for your comment xx
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Your poem is stark and filled with a reality that many in the pits of depression are unable to realize. It is hard to deal with someone we love hurting themselves. It also hurts our feelings that they seem to have so little regard for the people they will leave behind.
You tackled a tough topic and stated your point clearly without prettying things up. That was a nice touch, given the topic of your write.
Keep writing and welcome to the site.
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thankyou
thankyou for your comment. I have only just begun to take interest in poety. I dont no how i managed it the words just sort of came to me after a really bad night. I agree with you that people underestimate howhard it is for familys to deal with to. I was not trying to turn the problems into my own on this poem it was just honest how i was feeling at the time. thanks again your comment means alot to me xx
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Welcome to allpoetry
I had a similar situation, with an ex boyfriend of mine. It was terrifying to think that maybe one time he will go to far and kill himself. Eventually he stopped though and learned other ways to deal with the pain. Thanks for sharing
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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