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Heaven Is

 

 

 

 

 

"Then where is Heaven?", asked the puzzled child
The Wise One took her tiny hand and smiled
Then swept an arm across the earth and sky,

"It is right here, never far and not too high
Look with your Heart, my little one, and See
       For all who find their peace within are free;        
So search for beauty always in all things
For ever from the Soul true Heaven springs"

 


 

 

 

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  • Hetha gold member
    August 21

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    I didn't even notice the word count, until you mentioned it. You did this with flawless grace and function. You truly made this your own.

  • catz Moderators member
    June 3

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    This is simply beautiful... literally... simple and beautiful
    The message it carries is filled with wisdom, a lesson in life and fulfillment for this little child.
    Excellent writing and content.

    Dee

  • libithina
    May 21

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    I so loved this wise and true words s Lib
    look and you will see xoxox right to the core, this is a gift s

  • Zandorwolfe
    March 18

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    I like this, you always manage to capture the essence of feeling in so few words. gifted truly.
    I can always count on you for a good read, thanks for that. Interesting to that it expresses much of my own belief in such.


  • herrlurch
    March 10

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    simple, true, wonderful

    One word leads to another here. The poem is so simple that one might think it was a cinch to do it. Yet there is so much melody and wisdom in it. Well done! Herrlurch

  • lost-on-the-inside
    February 14
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    wow your good well hope we take again it was fun.
    well done!


  • AnnD Moderators member
    January 27

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    Aw. this is really lovely, and yet so true too.
    Peace within onesself is where heaven can be found.
    Beautifuly written.

    Ann

  • CarnalNineTailedFox
    January 26

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    this is so true and you have explained it so very well in this poem! i wish you the best of luck in the contest!
    NineTailedFox

  • Bedroom Eyes
    January 6
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    Truer words were never written Maat.

    Heaven is found within as well...in each of us, the light shines from the moment of our birth, and it surrounds us always. One need only look to find it...

    Very nice work!!!

    I look forward to reading more from you now


  • Winklings gold member
    November 10, 2007

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    I look again at these 70 words

    and I am sure that this verse should be internationally known. With permission, I should like to read it to Dr Rosenberg's Tuesday evening class, "Kawana Prose & Poetry Inc.".
    Ron.

  • Winklings gold member
    October 27, 2007
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    Four beautiful couplets

    As a unified poem they themselves are both beauty and wisdom. The poem enacts its own raison d'etre.

  • myrataal silver member
    October 27, 2007

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    It is a true Master-piece ...

    written in the style of Maatkara. What a lovely parable of Love and Light.

    Good to read you again, Genelle.

    Love
    Myra

  • celadia
    October 23, 2007

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    This was a lovely piece. It was a combination of innocence and wisdom, it made a beautiful statement.


  • Lord Gegishov silver member
    October 13, 2007
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    This is excellent.
  • ddannyboy
    September 30, 2007
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    good

    As a poem it is not only good but very very good but as a message it is distorted. To be real heaven must contain ugliness too. The child who has been taught that in heaven there is only beauty, he will be shocked as an adult when he will come to know that there is lot of ugliness in this world.

    • Maatkara Moderators member
      October 1, 2007
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      The only "distortion" is in your inference - there is none in advice to look for the positive in all things. Sorry you missed the point.

      Btw, you are not supposed to be on the site till November 6th
      • ddannyboy
        October 2, 2007
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        Aristotle would have been ashamed by your knowledge of logic!

        • Maatkara Moderators member
          October 2, 2007
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          LOL, non sequitur - still missed the point, predictably.

  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    August 26, 2007

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    The child is the root of who we become.

    A beautiful drama that pursuades without dillusion
    or pressure. It's there.

    I believe it to be the darling God who started it all...and I'm not ashamed at all of the perfection
    of someone above me. And am so humbled that it can be ours through Christ. Uncommon..

    Thank you so much.

  • Judo
    June 9, 2007
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    Sheenbot

    Absolutly stunning. Love it. Way to go to teaching children about Heaven!


  • Electric Sunrise Moderators member
    May 3, 2007

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    Thats a beautiful litle tear dropper of a poem, for something so short, it's immensly powerful, just confirms the statement, size doesn't matter! Beautiful, really.


  • She Has My Heart
    April 30, 2007

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    And after reading the poem: Wow that was a pretty wonderful poem too, thank you for entering it into my contest. I love it Good luck and take care x


  • She Has My Heart
    April 30, 2007
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    Firstly, before even reading the poem: Wow, that's a beautiful picture!

  • St.Pandemonium
    April 2, 2007
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    I STILL love this!
    Jay


  • cafegroundzero silver member
    April 1, 2007

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    This is lovely and short

    I wonder how we can teach this search and appreciation of beauty to those children who live in poverty, who live in homes which are rife with dysfunction, including abuse, constant distractions of tv, games, substance abuse of the elders and older siblings?

    To be sure, beauty is where you find it, as Madonna sang, but doesn't this require some faith in the seeker?

    Just wondering. Maybe you have some writing or ideas which address this problem, dear Maatkara.


    • Hekate gold member
      April 6, 2007

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      Hello cafegroundzero,

      Actions speak louder then words. You teach by quiet actions that hardly anyone knows.
      In which case Maatkara has done for me and continues to do.
      Sometimes if you are always looking on the outside you will fail to see and meet the needs on the inside.
      Ones personal circumstance does not have anything to deal with their heart and spiritual needs.
      You want to talk about Beauty?? It's closer then you think.
      Plus that silver she got looks like a shining beauty to me
      Ps. I am very fimilar with that background you desribed above which made me even more drawn to Maat.

      Kari

  • zhanis wolf
    March 13, 2007
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    i love this poem. it's so sweet and true. thank you for sharing this with us. gorgeous piece.

  • Winklings gold member
    March 11, 2007
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    Through childlike eyes ...

    we see wisdom. This poem was well worked at. One can see that this is so. You have almost a perfect marriage of poem and illustration. This is a Socratic style dialogue poem from my perspective. I enjoyed it handsomely.


  • Meme Wheeler
    March 5, 2007

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    Wise

    Wow, this is all about lifes big secret! The secret that so many search for, and very few find. We have made up in our minds this artificial image of what heaven is, and here it lies. This line exudes wisdom to the secret that many do not know. What you have written...

    For all who find their peace within are free;        
    So search for beauty always in all things
    For ever from the Soul true Heaven springs"
     


  • catz Moderators member
    February 22, 2007
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    I'm deeply touched by this wonderful conversation between the child and the wise one, Gennelle. You've written something that reaches into the heart and soul, it's very beautiful

    Dee

  • JoyBeingNow
    February 5, 2007

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    Very beautiful poem I get a Kahlil Gibran feeling from this one. It has the full evocative power of the fable, combined with the brevity of the poem.


  • Awakendragonking84
    February 2, 2007
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    wow! you are amazing! reminds me of those old poems i use to read in school. this was fantastic!


  • Thatpoet
    January 30, 2007
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    Do You Believe That Heaven Has Locality?

    Questioningly, I enjoy your poem. Do you believe that locality has anything to do with the spiritual? As they asked in Byzantine times, "How many Angles will fit on the head of a pin?" I own my own answer, but do not pretend to have it to give. Enjoyable poetry! ~S


    • Maatkara Moderators member
      January 30, 2007
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      Thank you! I believe the poem answers your question

  • St.Pandemonium
    January 30, 2007
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    Kudos

    Again, I loved this.
    Congrats on winning the silver!

  • SilentRose
    January 25, 2007

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    this makes sense...

    That was a very beautifulk poem and also very true! I agree with the statements made and it made me happy. Very nice.

  • medicalpoet
    January 25, 2007
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    great story... loved it! i can see the old man and the little girl... the sky and the earth; the mental image i get is vivid... great work!!!

  • St.Pandemonium
    January 25, 2007
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    This was so beautiful. I loved it.

  • rhondasail
    January 24, 2007

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    "Search for beauty always in all things", lovely line. And the truth of it is so simple yet staggering. Not just a few things or people, but ALL, even the ones we don't like to look upon. I loved the flow of this piece and it's deep abiding message of love in its most rich context, unconditional. Gifted write, poet. Thank you for sharing it. Peace to you, Rhonda


  • Etoile Filante
    January 23, 2007

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    Deffinatly my favourite of al the poems ive read resently. Nice one, so well *mystical* and Old style

    Well done
    Mollxxx


  • suseann
    January 23, 2007
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    Talented Pen!


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 22, 2007
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    Comes back to say BRAVO... BRAVO!!!!!


  • Angel With No Halo
    January 22, 2007

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    wow... this was beautiful. The meaning behind it was spiritual and enlightening .. I loved it. To find heaven in all things.. I believe that is so true. Great write and good luck in the contest.. I think this is definately award worthy!!
    ~Krys~


  • pen-inhand gold member
    January 22, 2007

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    Great picture. A wonderful flow to this work. I love the phrase "So search for beauty always in all things For ever from the Soul true Heaven springs." Gives me goosebumps. Beautiful! Kelly

  • Dragonollia
    January 22, 2007

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    I love the picture you featured with this poem. Very unique to write about the heavans and I like how you choose to use a child an a wise adult to tell the truth about the heaven


  • -Tesoro-
    January 22, 2007

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    This is really good.. It reminds me of a lot of things and reminds people to look within themselves to find true heaven.. atleast it did for me great job


  • pattyann4500 gold member
    January 22, 2007

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    Simply exquisite!

    Gennelle, Dearest, this is so loving and beautiful. Children need to know these things, and you have explained it perfectly. Heaven is all around us if we choose to see it. We make our own Heaven by believing, by wanting to see, and by sharing with others. I truly adore this piece, so I'll bookmark it and visit it with tea. Hugs, Patricia


  • Karen Layne
    January 22, 2007
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    I LOVE your picture here. I could just plop myself down into that sunset and drink the colours from the sky. The poem is well done, cute, a bit mysterious, and in it own way, very profound...good job.


  • Hope2MakeIt
    January 22, 2007

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    well done

    this is a very beautiful write from you. i wish you the best of luck in the contest. i do not think you will need it in life as you know where heaven is so will end up in the right place, no matter which way you go. thank you for sharing this with me. hope


  • klassy lassy
    January 22, 2007

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    Between you and MargaretG, my morning is touched with a white-winged throng. Thank you!


  • Kevin Moderators member
    January 22, 2007

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    beautiful piece, and I loved how concrete the conversation made it. The capitalization and cliche in the last line bothered me. Wise One was a bit odd as well... I'd prefer grandmother or tribe-mother or something. Maybe just "beauty in all things", as I expected the phrase to be?

    • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
      January 22, 2007

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      Ohh, I really love this.

      Gorgeous piece. I too like the conversation aspect and I like the diversity of "wise one" for two reasons. You could easily place an elder in your mind or any deity and still get the mystic sense of faith/unity of nature. Of course, being me, "wise one" could easily be witch since that is its meaning in many cultures and the reference to the elements makes it very earth-based friend. Great spiritual piece, it really does easily fit many molds. Bravo!

    • Maatkara Moderators member
      January 22, 2007
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      Thank you, Kevin! As it is metaphorical, the 'Wise One' is intended to be non gender specific, and actually an oblique allusion to any 'One' (to represent one's own idea of Wisdom personified, God if you will).

      A 70 word count is restrictive too

  • WolfHeart
    January 22, 2007

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    Heavenly!!

    This is a delightful poem. I love your use of rhyme in this. It speaks of simple faith and those things we cannot see, but believe exist. You never fail to leave with a contented sigh!!

    hugs Wolfie


  • crimson rose 247
    January 22, 2007

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    Thank you for your beautiful description. I loved the conversation that took place, truly is another way of depicting a story. I adore the curious child, and is the Wise from my heaven? you seem to have taken them.. lol..
    I commend you on a sweet entry, good luck!

  • MargaretG silver member
    January 22, 2007

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    You have said what I often think, that earth is a lot like heaven, if only people would look at it that way. The method of dialog is very good, we are put in the place of a little child, who knows no less than we do. Lovely couplets.


  • MyrddinEmrys
    January 21, 2007

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    In the still balance between All and One... in eternal Awareness... as close as the Breath from which we come... as deep as the farthest reach of thought... Here... Now... Wellpainted, well pointed dear poet.

    Shine brightly, Rod


  • Requiem of the Wolf
    January 21, 2007

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    Wow..

    Short, yet powerful...and kinda says in all. Even though it's short, you expressed major emotion in this. Great job!

  • Duana gold member
    January 21, 2007

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    Oh wow, that is a tearjerker. That is absolutely gorgeous- I would even say it is your finest yet. The flow is just beautiful! I'm printing this and putting this up in my workspace, just for inspiration.


  • suseann
    January 21, 2007

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    Fantastic piece of uplifting poetry.And also true. If anyone says bad ugly is in the mix as well.They'd be half right. Yet it only takes one drip of black paint,to purify and lighten a dulling white paint.And there can be no dark without the light,can be no wrong without the right. Balanced vision gives us living in heaven's light.~Suseann


  • Hekate gold member
    January 21, 2007
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    Awww this is so beautiful and touching..I love it. It paints a perfect picture in my mind while reading it.
    The graphic goes perfect with it to. The best of luck to you in the contest

    Kari

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