Lipstick
and eyeliner -
artistic expression,
red ribbons and lace, entwined.
Last words,
a blush secret -
soft pout of veneer woe,
lurid tears and tarnished metal.
Author notes
My fiance came up with this poetry form. It has 2,4,6,8 syllables and the second and fourth line of each stanza can be read backwords as well as the entire poem reading forwards too. It was fun to write.
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I loved the military form.I am going to have to try to give it a try.Looks,and sounds fun.Great write also...very interesting read indeed,to be tarnished is a horrible thing,tears overflowing with this awesome write.
Blessings
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Lol I've had a couple of confused comments as to how it actually works. What I meant is if you read the poem fluently (not line for line) with the first line going forward the second line going backwards and so on. For example written without line breaks in correct order the first stanza would be lipstick, eyeliner and artistic expression, entwined, lace and ribbons red.
and the second stanza is last words, secret blush a soft pout of veneer woe metal tarnished and tears lurid.
Also, the poem can be read all forwards...
The form is actually called the military form, hence the left right left right 2,4,6,8...
You may use the form, (it was my fiance's invention, edmo2k6) feel free...oh and I'm thinking about holding a contest using the form, although I realised i should be more clear on how the form works lol...
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interesting
I liked the form as well as the whole piece. I loved it backwards but have a question...I can see the 4th lines backwards but the 2nd ones? " eyeliner and-" and "-secret blush a" i dont see how those work by themsleves, or do you mean to add 2 and 4 together, with 4 being read first? ( if so a littel better and i love the idea but a little iffy, to me.) I do wish to try out this idea and will acknowledge you if i do so... THANKS PEG -
I have to say I loved it backwards it was a great read...nice job.
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great form of poetry, enjoyed the idea of left, right then left then right lol thank you for using my new form of poetry aswell by the way :-) love ya loads xx
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It is fun to look at new and slightly different poetic forms makes for interesting reading. I often read a poem backwards for effectI like the imagery you have put before me and the open end effect allowing the reader to take some ownership of thought. Nicely penned. thank you for the pleasure of this read. Hope the idea catcges on perhaps if you have the points you could host a contest.
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Very interesting, eye catching style and write. I loved it, in a very different way. It showcases something not many poems do.
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Interesting form. What are you calling this 2,4,6,8 form? Reading 2nd & fourth lines backwards, is cool. But in your 2nd stanza, line 2 can't be read backwards or it wouldn't make sense "secret blush a" If you drop the "a" it would work.
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I mean if you read the poem fluently as first line forwards, second line backwords, third line forwards, fourth line backwords...it would then read secret blush a/soft pout of veneer woe...It's really complicated...lol
Thanks for reading.
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