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Hope for Love

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Hope for Love

Intangible will never be genuine
changing thought to reality in vain
Flight of imagination is caprice
wasting our lives chasing dreams

The goal we seem to venerate
will never come to pass
Some say thought is powerful
I say it can’t be seen

So if thought can not be touched
focus on the same
To make your dream come true
aspire for the unseen, hope for love

 

 

 

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  • Manoura xx
    January 24, 2007

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    Princess Amera, This poem is so sad anything is possible, and you are loved by people all around you even if it isn't that obvious...great job lyk everything else you've written..bye!!!!!


  • PerVirtuous
    January 22, 2007

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    I see...

    Such vain love as you discuss is compartmentalized love, to be lived in a closet of the imagination and serve us as our slave. Of course such a thing can never be real. Love is not a thought, no! Love is an understanding! You so well capture the truth of this:

    "So if thought can not be touched
    focus on the same
    To make your dream come true
    aspire for the unseen, hope for love"

    Yes! Faith is the path to love. I have faith that you will find that path. Fantastic write.


  • trustjab
    January 21, 2007

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    yeah, that's right hope for love, especially if your other dreams won't come true. Thats at least one thing you can hope for and thats reason to come for. But this life is life and no more. We're only human. Dreams are just wishes. Wishes dont always come true, especially since most of them are far fetched. Great write. Exaughsting is lifes mysteries are they not?


  • Avalin
    January 21, 2007

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    descriptive

    nicely written! I liked your use of words I think it really made your message stand out. My faveorite line was :

    "To make your dream come true
    aspire for the unseen" - I get the message that you should just take a chance and go for it! Much enjoyed!

    ~Avalin~

  • Carole Dwinell
    January 21, 2007

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    Very good.

    I like how you take us through the ephermeral aspects of love yet showing the desire for it anyway. Some good words that take it above the ordinary. Excellent use of spacing. The poem looks good on the page. One little Nit from my NitPickPack. "...reality in vein" I think you mean "vain" <- fruitlessly vs "vein" transport tubes for blood and in leaf nutrients.
    Other than that sneaky little word, it's fine. (Sending the Nits back to their Pack since they weren't really needed)
    Best Regards, Carole Dwinell.

  • cherchezlafemme
    January 21, 2007

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    Tasteful

    A very nice way to put dreams in a dimension parallel to reality. Very effective thought and words. If you believe strong and without doubt in them, they shape up to state of clairvoyance and union, like a privileged relationship between unconscious and rational knowledge of the future. Dreams are self-fulfillment to our goals Great poem!!


  • Im3
    January 21, 2007

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    To The Point

    Very Good advice, and well put. I like your thoughts in this work, which shows me depth for which I could see. You take chances with no inhibitions, a nice difference from what I usually see in writings in this forum.


  • January 21, 2007

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    So touching...

    Princess Amera, This poem is so sad... Dreams are steps Heaven. Anything is possible, to touch the pure loving soul! Pandora's Box opened. All dispair and ills released. Yet hope remains... Bittersweet. Love Reuben

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