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As time spun by, as times pun by


Two shivers ripple shocks down spine
as one took stock mid rocks, lone pine
whose needle presence seeds cone cry,
as time spun by, as times pun by

Polaris Startrails (All Frames)
From far horizon sun’s decline
chromatic signals realign
as canvas linking ground and sky,
as time spun by, as times pun by
Polaris Startrails (All Frames)
Honeysuckle and woodbine, -
alternate spirals – intertwine,
approaches mirror echoed tie
as time spun by, as times pun by
Polaris Startrails (All Frames)
Past, present, future no design –
at least none one may need define –
links reminiscence, what may be,
as time spun by, as times pun by
Polaris Startrails (All Frames)
Each place we trace retains a tine
to tune the rune that chorus-line
repeats, refrains, refrains ally
as time spun by, as times pun by
Polaris Startrails (All Frames)
Who free would break convention's line
should fish free waters changed to wine
which won’t turn back to wave good-bye
as time spun by, as times pun by
Polaris Startrails (All Frames)
The mark one makes must lightly lie
as understatement or the lie
must out to flout each signal sign
as times pun by, as time spun by



Author notes

n.b. the absence of punctuation in the last line of each stanza, the differenciation of tense in each final line, and the rhyme inversion in the last verse are intentional

Rock Pine
http://www.flickr.com/photos/maikt/2086366841/
Interstanza pics
http://flickr.com/photos/cocoabeachjoe/1924133031/

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  • Shydreamer3
    July 20
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    The detail is impecable and the poem is beyond awesome. Very cleaver use of words and I definetly found myself wanting to keep reading. I loved it and i loved the flow it was truly written well. Wonderful write I must check out more of your poems in the future. Very refreshing and unique as well. GOOD JOB.

  • Ellis gold member
    November 30, 2007
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    snobbish content; very good sound

    Some individuals leave more behind than just a surface impression, if that.
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  • crystalgodess
    July 12, 2007
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    wow, verry good indeed. much enjoyed readind this fine work of yours. thanks for sharing


  • x Bright Eyes x gold member
    February 1, 2007

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    hi i thought this was very good i also enjoyed reading this i thought it was well written and my favorite part was stanza two

  • klassy lassy
    January 23, 2007

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    We do only see a fraction of what is, and not always clearly within a lifetime, and as big as things may seem within that line of vision, time places us all sooner or later, not turning back to wave goodbye. This is familiar,

    "as he takes stock mid rocks, lone pine
    whose needle presence seeds cone cry,"

    I always feel I could read these many times and still find something revealed. ~ Karen


  • April Renee
    January 22, 2007

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    rockin robin....

    great flow to this. you seem 2 have almost mastered it. most people can rhyme, but most cant make it sound/flow so good (well). nice job. enjoyed.

    blu


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    January 22, 2007
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    This is a wonderful piece of art you have penned, Bella
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