She is
She is the truck that's towing our love
And charging us to have it back
She is the screams of pains pushing a body from her womb
And vowed to never let it develop
She is temptation to break our love
And make us try another one
She is a booming loud voice
And never says a word
She is heat to my eyes
And always makes me cry
She is every tear my heart releases
And my insides jus' hurt me more
She is the pain in my back
And I give in to stayin in bed
The mother of my bestfriend, my love, "my bear", my dreams, my future, my trust, and more importantly my heart
She is.
What do I do when someone important to the one you love clearly wants me gone?
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I do like this, it's not to me hearts contempt, But I do like it, It's not your fault though I love long poetry, but this was still short, it got the point across. I want to read more, though. Cause I do like it.
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Answer: Press On
You already know how I feel about you as a writer and the growth you've shown over the past few month. We don't need to touch on that every time. But I truly enjoyed the depth and solice in your voice and how much pain I felt in reading this. If someone important to the one you love wants you gone, press on. Do what you have to do to make and create your own happiness. Don't allow others to come and take what you love away from you. You are the maker of your own destiny. I'm sorry you are in this situation but you'll make it through. You've proven your strength before and I am sure you will be a pillar of strength now. Great write, much love.
~KS
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Damn!
I am always amazed at your growth and your talent that continues to florish as you grow and experience new things. You once held a contest asking over 21 people to let you know what to expect or what they would let you know about adult life, I can see that you are a growing person as a poet and you no longer need that type of insight and I am so PROUD to witness this! Keep writin' because their is always a next level and then another level, and I know that you will continue to grow, Ray.
Now about this piece, lol, I LOVED THIS! It's so originial and relateable. I can definitely understand your pain in this piece. My husband's mom didn't like me too much when we first got together, but we worked through it and it will get better. Once she realizes that you want nothing more than to love her daughter, she will come around. Just don't let her be that person that pushes you away, this is a test of your love. So pass it, Ray. I know you can. Later. - cgirl0410
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