Lotus
Over all, rise
To reach enlightenment
Unstained corona reflecting
Sunshine
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Photo: "Mystic" by Michael Weinberg
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Beautiful im age and beautiful words
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'corona' lovely imagery
Lib x
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a good acrostic form though for my personal tastes it is too short a poem for me to get my teeth into
and i do like the cinquain, though i like the garland form with them. i thought to myself siting here, after our mad one ages ago, (well really me just being a git lol) i would come and see one of your poems.
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This is short, catches the intention. I like it. Well done.
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A stunning poem, beautifully presented, and says volumns. I of course saw Egyptian lotus when I was there a number of years ago, and they are indeed a beautiful flower. My friend there gave me a lovely bottle of essence of lotus, I still have some of it, and it still carries the fragrance after all these years. He told me I would be reminded of him for many years to come, each time I wear it. He's right
Your poem and the picture with it brought back lovely memories of those 28 days in November and December.
A lovely piece
Dee
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stunning. rich with beautiful imagery and taut emotion. great job!
Blessed be
Lizzy
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remarkable ...
i would be exaggerating to say my jaw dropped..
but it does strike an awe from that lovely piece..
and i can relate it to life as well
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It sure enough is! Both forms,whow! And a very pretty one at that.
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Maybe I'll unfold the petals that surround this mystical plume. Maybe I can unravel the secret talents that I have not encountered yet. I like this. It makes me want to reflect that sunshine within myself.
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A now departed member had commented here: "Ah, corona. Such a great word. It reminds me of John Donne's famous sonnet, La Corona. Nice."
I wasn't familiar with that one of Donne's, La Corona, but I am now...(coincidentally, his Holy Sonnet XIV had been playing in my head lately, the way a song does out of the blue)
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We have a lake filled with lily pads near hear. When the weather begins to warm, I am going to check some of them out to see if we have any Lotus blossoms. Your poem is as pretty as the picture and is as stunning.
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Beautiful sweet poem. It's very clever how you combined these 2 forms in such a natural way. Your words and imagery are beautiful and I love your picture which fits perfectly
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Is that the Asian or Egyptian Lotus? It makes a big difference! Ok, no it doesn't, but I bet I could have written for a few paragraphs explaining how it did.
Your cinguain showed me one thing...I'm not a lotus. I'm as thick as a stump and not getting any wiser.
"Unstained" I see that as the key word which could change to some extent the meaning...or so I'm pretending. That notion (maybe) that one needs to be unfettered to see the light...which would explain again why I don't.
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Thanks Yem Yes, it is the Asian one, Nelumbo Nucifera - and it does make a difference because it can grow to 10 feet above the muddy water and blooms measure about a foot across
Our souls are like the lotus, can grow up beyond the muck and remain untainted
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This is truly captivating. I like the combining of two forms and by the way, doesn't even read like most acrostics read. The Lotus denotes peace with the warmest sunshine tendered. My best,
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Lovely picture and the poem reflects the beauty and light of this magnificent flower so well. I liked the "unstained corona" - the center of the sun reflecting light and beauty. I've never writen an acrostic cinquain myself but I like what you've done here...you've managed to keep the flow of the traditional style - well-done. An elegant piece of writing. I also liked the way the first and last lines combine...lotus indeed equals sunshine. Thank you for this entry and good luck in the contest.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you, Nic Love your winners.. great contest.. and thanks for helping to get my muse out of her malaise
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this is soft, sensual and has a great quality in the tone
good luck on the contest
Tamara
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Hi, this is beautiful, and MargaretG put it perfectly! I have never tried this form before (or even heard of it) (or if I did I don't remember), but maybe I will! I love short form, and try any I come across. Thanks for this unexpected inspiration.
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You don't write often, but when you do, it is worth waiting for. Your acrostic cinquain has mystical symbolism and lovely imagery. Weinberg's photo is fantastic. Good luck!
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Awww that's so sweet and beautiful...I understand it to I think that you did wonderful. The best of luck to you in the contest.
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Oh,I missed it being a cinquain as well. I was so delightfully destracted by the piece it's self and it being an acrostic.I overlooked the inclusion of the fact via the title of your poem and a contest requirement. ~Suseann
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Wonderful acrostic of the lovely kind! This piece weaves is own magic just as does the lotus. There is beauty in it's up reach to the heavens so strait and majestically strong. Lovely flowr and poem to match.~~Suseann
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