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Shadows of Dark and Light

 

 

 

                                                                      

 

Libera nos a malo

deliver us from evil

 

 

Words echo in shadows of twilight

carved into mind, more chilling than this wind

that stings the cheeks and brings tears to the eyes.

 

 

Through the blur of these tears

shadows indistinguishable.Does evil lurk in this falling darkness

or behind the silver strands of the moon.

One solitary owl perched on the fence,

messenger of death and reaper of souls.

And the wind carries the last breath of the old man

the screech of the owl interrupting this stillness of black.

 

 

The snow,

it has begun to fall gently, clouds are sprinkling in lace

and the darkness gives way to a blanket of white,

snowflakes dance to a gentle rhythm,

pas a deux on the frosty lake.

Reflections of the nightingale that has begun to sing,

messenger of life and blesser of souls.

And the wind carries the first breath of the new baby

the song of this bird interrupting this stillness of white.

 

 

Libera nos a malo

deliver us from evil

 

And in this night of a thousand shadows,

the breath of death , the breath of life meet between here and eternity,

lingering in forever suspension, in knowledge of black and white,

birth of a conscience.

 

 

walk in light in spite of the dark,

know of the dark in spite of the light.

 

 

 

 

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Maybe these are the secrets of the shadows, duality of good and evil in every man

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  • Touchof1der silver member
    February 5, 2007

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    I get more and more impressed as I read through the entries here. You guys are making this so hard for me. The creativity that flows across the page here and elsewhere throughout the contest has left me breathless and in awe. This is simply divine work. Your muse must have been in high gear here. I appreciate you taking the time and making the effort to enter my contest. Thank you and good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der


    • cherche -d -ame
      February 6, 2007
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      thanks KimberlyBTW, maybe you could tell me how I can applaud a contest nowadays. It used to be something I did all the time before the site upgraded, and now I seem to be unable to do so,
      thanks again
      xoxoxoxo
      reenie


  • sandgoddess
    January 28, 2007

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    Lovely piece, creates a vivid nature scene and blends into it mystical thoughts - well done.

    I had some trouble reading the small fonts, maybe you could consider enlarging the font size a bit for ppl with short eyesight...

    I have one suggestion if you don't mind:

    'dancing to an unheard melody, a waltz playing'

    I feel there's an over elaboration of the dance motiff. maybe you can better entwine the repetiton of
    'dancing-melody-waltz-playing or give up some of them?

    just my opinion - take it or leave it.

    best luck in your contest,
    rachel

    • cherche -d -ame
      January 29, 2007
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      Rachel, thank you. I changed that line some and after the contest I will consider changing the font as well. For some reason I think this small font in white makes it a bit more mysterious....as if a fading night?
      z
      reenie

      • sandgoddess
        January 29, 2007
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        'snowflakes dance to a gentle rhythm,
        pas a deux on the frosty lake.
        Reflections of the nightingale that has begun to sing,'

        this is a beautiful revision. it 'breaths' much nicer.

        again - beautiful piece!

        rachel


  • Trixie08
    January 25, 2007

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    WOW!!!

    This piece is so insightful and the phrase "Libera nos a malo" Latin I think. I loved how it repeats throughout the poem and that was an excellent touch. Nature poems are just so deep and spiritual and this one is no exception. Also the lines:

    Words echo in shadows of twilight

    Carved into mind, more chilling than this wind

    That stings the cheeks and brings tears to the eyes.

    ------------------------------------------------------
    The really got me thinking- they are symbolic in a way, how you used shadows of twilight in sort of a personification. That was brilliant and very beautiful as well as insightful.


  • Malign Mentality
    January 24, 2007

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    WOW! this was amazing. i am really big on setting a mood or espressing emotion with poetry and this is a great example. you are a great poet. please keep up the good work.


    • cherche -d -ame
      January 25, 2007
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      thank you so much for your encouraging comment. It is always appreciated,
      reenie


  • Poetdontknowit
    January 23, 2007
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    GREAT

    What a beautiful piece of poetic penning. It is just awesome!
    POETDONTKNOWIT


  • dustookie2
    January 23, 2007

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    You set up the atmosphere and keep the attention and interest through to the end. There was an eeriness with a haunting quality for wanting to read on. The layout presentation just added to the quality of the post. I like the philosophyof the last two lines so applicable to life.Thank you for the pleasure of a well crafted poem


  • Atrus Darktree
    January 22, 2007

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    WOW!!!!!!!

    Great work!!!!!
    The Italics really help the mood, and the use of Latin is excellent. A masterpiece!
    Overall: 10.0/10.0!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • Lady-Pegasus
    January 22, 2007
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    sadly

    I tried to read this as it seems to be a nice write, but the small italics made it too hard to read. I did catch one thing, lol u r missing a space in between 2 words ( i think) in the 3rd stanza. If you ever change this font let me know, id love to read it !!! PEG

    • cherche -d -ame
      January 23, 2007
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      I am so sorry that the font gave you problems , but I can see why. I might change it after the contest, right now I believe it sort of fits the mystery of dark and light. And thank you for pointing out the typo. I fixed it,
      reenie


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    January 22, 2007
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    Wonderful poem ReenieYour imagery painting the Shades of Night is just wonderful

    'walk in light in spite of the dark,
    know of the dark in spite of the light.'

    Loved these lines . They make this such a powerful ending.
    My best to you in this contest
    Gaylenes


  • nell
    January 21, 2007

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    your phrasing is superb, the way you are able to paint pictures and take the reader on the journey with you is awesome. good luck in the contest

    shanelle

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