My darling sweet champion
I see life clearly
my guilt that poisons
almost corrupting me nearly
with my selfish reasons.
I love you so
losing all my will
as I followed you
not thinking one ill.
I would rather loose
than hurt a friend
so seperation I choose
to all pretense end.
I envied my sister
I knew you first
growing into a blister
loving your sweet verse.
I loved you sure
that you do know
but it wasn't pure.
So, I must go.
My sister let go
of you for me
and I was so
in love with glee.
You deserve someone who
feeds from your gaze
without rue loving you
like my sister's ways.
I thought how she
loved you much more
and better than me
since you she adored.
I am unfortunately broken
by life and fate
earning paradise by tokens
presented before heaven's gates.
I fail at love
because of my past
wanting you I shove
you away at last.
Iohagh
Janet McCall
Author notes
Darling
My first poem told you my mind and my second tells you why. I have nothing if not my integrity and that I give as my gift of love to you. Smoosh
Janet
Please tell me what you think
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I wonder why love poems have a sad part within. That is why I define love as sorrow painted by joy’s color. This stanza show the depth of your love and your great sacrifice in its way:
“I would rather loose
than hurt a friend
so seperation I choose
to all pretense end.”
It is always a pleasure to read your works. Thank you for sharing your poetic piece here with us :-)
~Massy~
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very good
once again you have done a great job my dear and with the weather here -20 to -45 wind chill expected your writes bring a needed warmth to my frigid soul keep doing well
love papa -
'I am unfortunately broken
by life and fate
earning paradise by tokens
presented before heaven's gates.
I fail at love
because of my past
wanting you I shove
you away at last.'
Janet, my dear, this shall change I assure you from the bottom of my heart. Not overnight and not next week or next month, but it 'shall'. For you are endowed with so much yet unexpressed love it staggers the imagination. Immerse yourself into what your goal is for the children now as 'that' is what will eventually draw 'him' to you in one way or another. And when he sees you across the room that first time, trust me, you shall know him by his wide eyes and his dropped mouth.
love ya gal
Dad
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Ahhh...letting go is not easy.
It is so worthwhile to love. It is even more of a kind gesture to self and others to "Let Go"!
I am reminded of a sermon I heard by TD Jakes where he said when a person comes into our lives they come with a purpose. That purpose is to touch our lives and lend to us whatever is in need at the appointed time. When that person moves on and leaves us behind, we should be reminded of all the good they have left us with and use that to better ourselves.
The honor and forthrightness in this poem is evident. You are a loving spirit, and it is sometimes better to release than hold on. This poem is intense, and spills from a sincere heart my dear.
All will be well in the end. Know that and move forth.
Always Lovingly ♥
Renee
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Priceless.
Smoosh.
Again, as in the last, you speak with kindness and still honour this individual. As you journey on- it is bound to leave no scars of will. How refreshing, and I think one worthy of a champion will presevere- in the knowledge that to ever be in such a soft place as your heart- must also be gifted.
Marvelous and delicate.
-J.
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wow this is really deep as I read this poem and knowing alittle on your past hurts of what you have shared with us this is very heart felt, I fell you need to grow the love that you have for your self, for (ones self) in order to truely find that kind of mirrored love we all want.Well done Janet this is a great piece, smooshes to you.
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Pretty cool!
I love your little poem about amoroso. Isn't lovee a principle of desire and cognition that keeps the world alive and in constant motion? To me anyway, love is a principle of spiritual elevation between two human hearts in its highest expressions.. It's a beautiful bond full of matchless allegories and making a sensual metaphor of human life. Serenely in love
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Love is a word that we all want to have, but there are so many different kinds and facets of this idea that we sometimes miss things, change things, and do things that we really do not want to do or can do. Love is something that means different things to different people - and sometimes two people who love each other do so coming from different perspectives. Today kids who have only met tell each other they love each other, when really they are in love with being in love. Very heartfelt, personal and open. Enjoyed the read.
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Mind blowing poem.
Once again Janet you show us why your are a master poet. -
I humbly submit that if my friend was to step one small rung up the ladder of love, the entire world would look completely different. Keep your love, and see the face of your love in everyone you meet. Transcend the indulgent love of the flesh with the unconditional love of the soul. Nothing will be lost and much will be gained. Good luck. Wonderful write, as always.
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interesting again, you have somthing in you that no one can ever mock, copy or replace, keep it flowing
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As your uncle I say...
You know your mind
and your feelings too
of integrity you find
although you do rue.
Take your time heal
for all your regrets
nothing that you feel
will let you forget.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
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