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My Beloved

 

We vowed till death us do part

But our life together ended all to soon.

I still walk down the same old path

Expecting to see you still standing there.

 

I still feel your arms around me

Your kisses are with me still.

Words you spoke remain in my ear

Visions of you haunt my every thought.

 

Every word I speak

I still say to you.

In everything I see

I still see you there.

 

I remember your beautiful smile

And your tender touch.

You’re with me in every room

In each corner I see your image.

 

You promised me forever

But forever came to soon.

You promised till death do us part

But you have not parted from me.

 

For you are with me still

I will forever love you.

And for me, my forever will come soon

For my beloved I now join you once more.

 

Life here for me is done

Today we shall be together.

In life our love was fated

But in death it shall live.

 

 

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  • Restless heart
    June 21, 2007

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    this is a story that only only a lost love soul could write speaks to every heart that has loved and lost


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    June 10, 2007

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    Please pass the tissues tears flowing here...This is such a beautiful poem and filled with deep emotions of love and loss Thank you so very much for sharing and entering


    • freespirit51
      June 10, 2007
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      Thanks my sister for your wonderful comment. I am so glad you enjoyed it.


  • arafura gold member
    June 10, 2007

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    it shall live...

    Sad but somehow uplifting at the same time... timeless love! I liked your word choices and the obvious emotion behind the words!

    • freespirit51
      June 10, 2007
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      Thanks for the great comment. i am glad yoiu enjoyed the piece.


  • Wind-Spirit
    June 8, 2007
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    awesome

    a tear falls, i feel yur pain but love yur words.. i know them too well!!


  • th3sl4y3r
    May 23, 2007

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    this is a well written emotional poem, alot of this I can relte to but for different reasons... I love these lines...
    "You promised me forever
    But forever came to soon.
    You promised till death do us part
    But you have not parted from me.

    For you are with me still
    I will forever love you.
    And for me, my forever will come soon "
    so beautifully put, so sad and full of loneliness and passion.. well done!!
    thank you for entering my contest and good luck..
    peace and light always..


    • freespirit51
      May 29, 2007
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      Thanks again. This was one of the hardest pieces I have had to write. For some reason I had a hard time getting it to flow and still say the words I wanted. Glad it touched you.


  • bananasfoster42
    February 3, 2007
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    this is an excellent write. thanks for entering


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    January 30, 2007
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    Congratulations...


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    January 23, 2007

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    Heartfelt poem

    Wow, i loved this a lot, your inspiration has reached great heights You did a wonderful job in this contest, it is a very emotional write
    My favorite part:
    I will forever love you.
    And for me, my forever will come soon

    Wish you lots of luck in this contest
    XXJeannette


  • B Chandler
    January 21, 2007
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    Do not reply

    Find a more subtle backdrop


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    January 21, 2007

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    A very beautiful write Mom...this is a great write. Good luck to you in the challenge.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • ImmaculateDesire
    January 20, 2007

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    I love how you are influenced by another poet's style and content. So closely you have mirrored it. This is an excellent write. You have captured her sentiments so well. Thanks for the history lesson. Thanks for sharing this with me. It has been a great story of survival that you have written about. Wow!! Take care.Good luck in the contest, my friend.


  • candyinchelsea
    January 20, 2007

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    wonderful

    wow,
    what a sad and beautiful poem
    its so amazing what real love can do to the human spirit.
    it can heal you or it can break you
    i hope for myself that i will never let love take over
    my life and that i can feel free when i am in love.
    its so scary sometimes what happens to us when we truly open our hearts.
    i think the path to true love is a good sence of
    oneself and alot of laughter and great sex of course.
    god bless
    candy


  • Providence
    January 20, 2007

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    Beautiful. A touch of human love and the embrace of eternal love. Just wonderful.

    And thanks for introducing me to a new poet. I will have to read more of her works.

    Namaste!
    Marianne

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