Desert
blossomed beauty
embedded sorrow’s sands
vibrant petals unclothed; pending
morn’s dew.
Author notes
Love's sorrows
In a list
A contest entry
- Sensual flowers & some other S-words... by Nicolette.
700 points, ended January 30, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - short writes by kristianman.
450 points, ended May 22, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very good write, great cinquain, thank you for entering my contest and good luck, K
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Love the alliteration in these lines - flowing gently from one line to the next with an urgency, as these flowers often do not last a very long time. Lovely form, lovely poem.
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This is beautiful, and truly reflective of love's sorrows. Enjoyed reading!
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This is beautiful, dear gent. First, I love form poetry. Secondly, I love any poetry about flowers. So you gits a double wow from this southern bella. Luv ya, ♥
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Ma Belle.
where been girl....??? Oh being a male and all....I do love writing about flowers....nature and love....they are to me all connected.....thanks for dropping me a line.....
Hugs
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I like the image of a desert you've created here...the desolation and the lone flower blooming in the sands...it compares so well with love's sorrows and the waiting for dew. The thorny images of a cactus highlight the concept even more. A lovely cinquain and the syllable count is perfect. Thank you for this entry and good luck in the contest.
~ Nicolette
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Hi Zayra
love your wordy comments
anyways...thanks for reading it I feel honored and thanks for the applause too
Hugs
Mal
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I love it. I see it's about Love's sorrows and I understand fully on what it means. I've been hurt so many times that I give up on love and I just don't "believe" in it anymore. I don't even like the word love anymore. Anyway, off subject big time. Great write with a big meaning. I love it, Brother. Keep it up.
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