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prom....

all the girls are bustling, almost like christmas day
while the guys just laugh and carry on with their way
me and my friends, looking at dresses galore
some of them cute, most just look like a whore
but for me prom night is not about the dance
it's about my one and only... what we want to make last
and hopefully by then, we'll be able to hold each other tight
and not have to leave, when we kiss goodnight
so for all the hours of hair and dresses
it'll be worth it, when I look impressive
with decorations hung and smile on all faces
I will be delighted with our dance paces
now hopefully yall will be able to read this with joy
realize I'm bad at rhyming but realize the meaning it decoy's(?)
um... bye yall!!

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  • snakeprince4
    March 1, 2007

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    good

    This is a very nice poem. Indeed this thing we know as prom is quite the hassle. lovely read dearest


  • Man of Harlech silver member
    January 20, 2007

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    "Decoys" is an interesting word, meaning representation, I hope, and not plastic duckies. Something about Proms that stirs our memory
    into a mixture of hurt, excitement and humor. It seldom measures up to the expectation that we have and it may take a bad turn for a few. This write illustrates the delight of innocence and of growing up. It is an appropriate attitude toward a very special event in the high school experience. I will look forward to hearing about what happened.


  • Sagergirl
    January 20, 2007
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    This poem gives off your energy. I could feel your excitement as you are looking forward to your prom. I never went to my prom. I didn't want to and I don't recall why I made that decision. I hope you have a very exciting and fun prom. I hope it's all you hope for and more!!

  • PalmettoSky
    January 20, 2007

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    I felt every emotion in this. Vivid, abstract and yet everything comes together. I truly feel the depth from this. So much truth. I loved every line of this piece as its' very touching and just full of positive thoughts and energy. Stunning imagery and the flow to this piece is quite impressive. Lovely write!! Great message in this poem. Thought provoking, Imaginative, and I loved your creative imagery. Your carefully chosen words painted a picture as I read your poetic work of art. I am glad I read it. thanks for sharing. Keep up the great work. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways.


  • Tirrell
    January 20, 2007
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    I never atedned my proms, I thought them a waste of
    time for I never held any attachment to my school days.
    I have never seemd to be as others were -- to quote poe. Yet this has the reminisent quality where beauty roams. well compesed and brightly lit poem .

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