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Draw near, my Dear ... All this and more

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Draw near, my dear, and take my hand,
we’ll travel to true wonderland,
spite cold's sharp bite, white frozen lake,
without delay we’ll double take
from lies, disguise, - wise, understand
life's crystal beauty, flake by flake.
 
Draw near, my dear, though woods be cold,
though nights oppress, together bold,
we’ll weave sure way without a bend
from start to journey’s happy end,
where dark dissolves as warmth we hold
within with friend supporting friend.
 
Draw near, my dear, here let us chart
the way to reach contented heart,
the way to learn, the way to teach,
the way where each may share with each,
the way pure ends, maintained from start
to end, lend, spend, send silent speech.
 
Draw near, my dear, let us sustain
your strength, ensure tuned strings remain,
from strife and strain draw buoyancy
to bounce back, track the way to see
horizons blue and to retain
refrain both optimistic, free.
 
Draw near, my dear, the thoughts you send
should flourish, nourish, poor defend,
for your imporant message must
not be deformed, dust-stormed, for trust
support, shan’t ever condescend,
transcending dangers, stings unjust.
 
Draw near my dear, through cloudy skies
we’ll beam to light stream and surprise
whatever weather harsh would whirl
about, around, with squall, pall, swirl, -
churn cream from mist dismissed and rise
with cheer sight clear, translucent pearl.
 
Draw near, my dear, to land of dreams,
to shadows weaving silver streams,
to nights of selenite that build
from man to maid faith's span instilled
melt wraith fence, difference, - hope’s gleams,
will breach tall walls, leave each joy filled.
 
Draw near, my dear, nor flood, nor tide,
shall break your banks or override
endeavours, - rainbow links - proposed,
nor undermine, design exposed.
The bridges that your love supplied
with grace in place remain, abide.  
 
Draw near, my dear, my song shall charm
birds from their trees, disease disarm,
to soothe, to move, new smiles discern
that spread from head to heart to earn
an inner peace where balm and calm,
infectious, caught by all, return.
 
Draw near, my dear, no strap sheet white
should trap your sap, wrap mapless night,
for sore, hurts, heal, hope sets fresh score,
links light to laughter evermore.
I sketch wings stretched for future flight.
For you I'd write, draw this and more …
 

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  • i like this here you really did a great job and i love the falling rose petal that is amazing thanks for sharing
  • definately a finalist

    Outstanding work.

  • honey bear
    May 12

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    thank you for entering and good luck in the contest with this lovely and love filled poem

  • very beautiful
    i love the background
    and the poem is well written
    thanks for entering =]
  • Oh this was just so beautifully written!
    The imagery in this was amazing and the
    flow to your words just took the reader along..
    You did a really great job with this write!
    Bravo! best of luck to you..

    Angel
  • this is a marvelous poem

    well written good flow and rhyme scheme is excellent nothing seems forced, just a good write

    Thank you for this entry and good luck in the contest


  • Pretani gold member
    May 7

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    Yeah I like the back ground too! And this:

    whatever weather harsh would whirl
    about, around, with squall, pall, swirl, -
    churn cream from mist dismissed and rise
    with cheer sight clear, translucent pearl

    nicely penned - thanks for entering

    . Rewarded 4

  • I was amused with the background more. lol. I liked it though. Thanks for entering and good luck.

  • trista gold member
    April 27

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    I can't even tell you how lovely I find this entire poem... Despite its length (or maybe because of it) it is beautifully all-encompassing of what so many of us want, need, search for, and even promise. There are other lines smoother (3 rhyming words seems complimentary, 4 seems clunky, awkward...but that's just me. ) and/or more beautifully worded, and yet this line: "to end, lend, spend, send silent speech." struck me most for some reason. I guess the "silent speech" part, which is something I find very sacred in a love relationship.

    Thank you for guiding me here to read this. I have bookmarked and added it to my favorite poems by other poets list, but if for any reason you'd rather it not be in my list please let me know.

    Peace and Blessings,
    ~J.

    . Rewarded 8


  • Sorath
    April 17

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    WOW!! That is all I can say because this was gorgeous and I loved every word of it!! Thanks for the great write!

    . Rewarded 4

  • ichigosama
    April 13

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    ichigosama

    it sounds like you're taking someone special somewhere. is it on vacation? wherever and whatever it is i like it. draw near my dear my song shall charm birds from their trees and disease disarm. thanks for entering and good luck.

  • Midgetbridgey
    April 13
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    Good poem but i don't care for the repition.


    Goodluck!

  • Caellach
    April 9
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    I loved this. The repetition made it flow wonderfully. Great write!
  • EXCELLENT JOB!! I love the flow of this poem! I can feel the mood of it! This is exactly what this contest was about!

  • Passive
    April 3
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    Very good rhyme throughout, a very very good love poem
    Good luck in the contest

  • Frodofan silver member
    April 1

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    "melt wraith fence, difference, - hope’s gleams,"
    ^This line seems a little rough.

    "endeavours, - rainbow links - proposed"
    ^This line seemed a little sappy.

    Otherwise - so compelling! What an excellent scheme and your rhythm is very lovely. I'm trying to figure out what to say exactly, but I think I am slightly overwhelmed by the fact that someone actually entered a metered, rhyming, poem with such a complex scheme and that was relatively long yet still held my attention. Thank you very much for entering.

    This is a delightful poem.

    . Rewarded 8


  • fantasysmurf gold member
    January 27

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    I like!

    The repetition draws out a new chapter for the verses. I enjoyed the thought of a perfect gentleman caring for my every need. It is refreshing to read poetry written by male poets. Im thinking Shakespeare, Keats, and Shelley. Have added you as a favourite.


  • Providence
    August 29, 2007
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    Line after line is just brimming with heart felt devotion!

    Loely indeed.


  • Amanda1
    July 12, 2007

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    Very nice use of imagery to promote feeling. I liked your words thick with emotion. I'm sure you felt wonderful after having all the emotion on page. Keep up the good work!

  • Cannonsfire silver member
    February 3, 2007

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    So much emotion contained with flow of beauty, and feelings that pour forth from the page. A truly masterful write.

    . Rewarded 4


  • AngelKissez059
    February 3, 2007

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    very very well done

    VERY VERY WELL DONE! it says so much and theres alot of passion in your writing i think i'll put you on my favorites because this is wonderful. i loved the last stanza becuase it realates alot to happiness my favorite quote in the last stanza is "i sketch wings stretched for future flight". to me this says that someone will fly with courage and strength when they pass.

    . Rewarded 4


  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    February 3, 2007

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    this has a breath of fairytale in it (much better than Disney ever did)it sings of birds and fayries and butterflies and breezes, yet there is a reality of melancholy and yearning as well. I guess it is a fairytale for adults that have not lost the ability to dream. (I have not read Sonja's as of yet).There is so much hope in these words,
    reenie

    . Rewarded 4


  • klassy lassy
    January 22, 2007

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    "my song shall charm
    birds from their trees, disease disarm,"

    And that it does, your touch of heart, Jonathan... I am enthralled with this...and more!
    ~Karen


  • Sonja gold member
    January 20, 2007

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    I am realy honoured to see that my poetry could be inspiration to somebody else - to other poets, to rewrite it. Today it happend for the second time. This is a great surprise to me and probably it could be the top wish of poet's success. But, in my opinion, I still have to learn and each poet has it's own poetic style and poetic posibilities and of course it's readers. My own poslibilities are still bordered with a lack of English language knowledge.
    Your poem is much different than mine but it brings the same message because the quintessence was the same.
    ~Sonja~

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