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Draw near, my Dear ... All this and more

 
 
  

Draw near, my dear, and take my hand,
we’ll travel to true wonderland,
despite cold's bite, white frozen lake,
without delay we’ll double take
from lies, disguise, - wise, understand
life's crystal beauty, flake by flake.
 
Draw near, my dear, though woods be cold,
though nights oppress, together bold,
we’ll weave sure way without a bend
from start to journey’s happy end,
where dark dissolves as warmth we hold
within with friend supporting friend.
 
Draw near, my dear, here let us chart
the way to reach contented heart,
the way to learn, the way to teach,
the way where each may share with each,
the way pure ends, maintained from start
to end, lend, spend, send silent speech.
 
Draw near, my dear, let us sustain
your strength, ensure tuned strings remain,
from strife and strain draw buoyancy
to bounce back, track the way to see
horizons blue and to retain
refrain both optimistic, free.
 
Draw near, my dear, the thoughts you send
should flourish, nourish, poor defend,
for your imporant message must
not be deformed, dust-stormed, for trust
support, shan’t ever condescend,
transcending dangers, stings unjust.
 
Draw near my dear, through cloudy skies
we’ll beam to light stream and surprise
whatever weather harsh would whirl
about, around, with squall, pall, swirl, -
churn cream from mist dismissed and rise
with cheer sight clear, translucent pearl.
 
Draw near, my dear, to land of dreams,
to shadows weaving silver streams,
to nights of selenite that build
from man to maid faith's span instilled
melt wraith fence, difference, - hope’s gleams,
will breach tall walls, leave each joy filled.
 
Draw near, my dear, nor flood, nor tide,
shall break your banks or override
endeavours, - rainbow links - proposed,
nor undermine, design exposed.
The bridges that your love supplied
with grace in place remain, abide.  
 
Draw near, my dear, my song shall charm
birds from their trees, disease disarm,
to soothe, to move, new smiles discern
that spread from head to heart to earn
an inner peace where balm and calm,
infectious, caught by all, return.
 
Draw near, my dear, no strap sheet white
should trap your sap, wrap mapless night,
for sore, hurts, heal, hope sets fresh score,
links light to laughter evermore.
I sketch wings stretched for future flight.
For you I'd write, draw this and more …

 

 

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Contest lost-oddette *soul meet's soul on lover's lip's

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  • Joshuavk
    November 29
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    Yep, the gold trophies speak for themselves, and absolutely amazing poem.
    You nearly lost me somewhere halfway cause I felt it becoming tedious, but you managed to draw me back in. Great written, absolutely a great poem.

    Cheers, Joshua.


  • Fire-Fly
    November 10

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    I'm very sorry to DQ you, it's absolutely no reflection on your poem obviously but this poem is way over the size I requested.

    Rules are rules I guess.


  • Graciee
    October 29

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    An Excellent Piece.

    I really like reading this. You had everything planned out, from the rhyming pattern, to the complexity of the poem itself. A great write. Thank you for your entry,

    Good luck in the contest!!

    Graciee


  • happy kitty kat
    October 21
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    oh my

    gee got enough trophies there? ha ha best of luck


  • darkyinsoul
    October 15

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    excellent

    poem you have penned
    beautiful write indeed
    love this stanza...

    Draw near, my dear, and take my hand,
    we’ll travel to true wonderland,
    despite cold's bite, white frozen lake,
    without delay we’ll double take
    from lies, disguise, - wise, understand
    life's crystal beauty, flake by flake.

    congrats on all the shineys
    thanks for the share
    Darky

  • closetpoet99
    October 15

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    this is beautiful, the imagery is amazing and the flow really works. the tenderness of it really pulls it all together


  • sinfull
    October 7

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    Draw near, my dear, has drawn a crowd,
    they pause, applaud and praise out loud,
    despite white knight might wait at home,
    your light shines brite within your poem,
    they gather here to glimpse the gleam
    of joyfull journey's ending dream.

    and rightly so. =)


  • Rayne Dance
    September 30

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    WOW!

    I think I love you!! Haha this is truely fantastic and very detail!! Thank you for entering my contest and making me feel like a person of beauty and making it personal about writing and drawinf hears for me :0) GOOD LUCK!!!


  • evershine-90
    September 28

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    Beautiful write, love the place you transported me to with your wonderful words, well written and amazing flow, Enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing
    Evershine


  • Crazy-Love
    September 7

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    A Darling write! So beautiful! You have a gift.
    Thanks so much for entering and Good Luck!

    Crazy-Love♥


  • xBloodPromisedx
    September 1
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    Honestly, I'm speechless. Amazing write... Good Luck.


  • Sweet-Sins
    August 28

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    this is nice- i enjoyed it, but not the type of love poem i was exactly looking for.
    nice write though!

    x


  • crivanea silver member
    August 24

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    wahhhh!! so sorry! I forgot about the PW button

    but your poem is soooo amazing!! i love it...what beautiful flow in this...wonderful background too..and congrats on all the trophies well deserved


  • kylierenea
    August 15

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    This is a very beautiful poem and I like how you used flower petals and images to help set the tone. Very well written, keep up the good work Good luck on your other contests as well.


  • BlindingLove
    August 10

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    I can see how your a trophy winner! This was simply beautiful.


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    July 30

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    Congratulations on all your trophys you earned them, love is such a beautiful thing. This is such a beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing and it was a pleasure to read


  • baawri
    July 24

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    Beautiful love poem, I was lost reading this one. The picture was also very beautiful. Wish you a very bright future. Take care.


  • Dezzy26
    July 15
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    This poem is beautiful thankyou for your entry. Good luck in all your contests!


  • Umi Juvariel
    April 9

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    The form and the flowers in-between were very well done, and I enjoyed this poem greatly. It flowed well and made me smile. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.

  • Welp, this is not bad. I'm not sure I want to see every poem as a rhyme though. So far this is the 3rd one that has rhymed and it's good to mix it up. While your rhyme isn't all that forced. I give you a 10 for this poem. You've got a total of 30. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you. kahy


  • Amandainlove
    March 21
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    This was nice.
    Good luck.

  • Beautifully written and I love the form.. fantastic write! Full of heart and emotion, cut through imagery and around and around beautiful words! The flow was wonderful. All in all if I were to rate this poem 1-10 It would be 11! You are a talented writer and I hope to see more of your work very soon!


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    February 24

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    This is wonderfully writen, so easy to read, and captivating. You captured true emotion here, I could even feel the love in this and that sort of thing usually doesn't even begin to impact me. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • Abstract Image
    February 23

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    Incredible write you have here. it's absolutely beautiful. I can see why this got so many golds and i loved the background, Cherry Blossoms are my favorite flowers ...thanks for entering GL


  • storiesuntold gold member
    February 6

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    Excellent write here

    It is within the touch or the words to care and share to be there within the moment to help others find the light and to rise above all pain and know joy is derived from within but one must believe it can be and see it through and once embraced will never look back again


  • Violent Glass
    January 24
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    this is absolutly beautiful
    i think you did a great job
    thanx for sharing it with me!

  • Heavenly poem, I'm surprised to see a silver trophy here, they should all be gold.


  • gigglesalot
    January 5
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    a little longer than i asked for but the flow of it kept me interested. thank you for entering!


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    December 24, 2008

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    I think this, is simply fantastic. I mean, no this is definitly what i was looking for.
    A very well written piece of work here.
    Thanks for entering.
    Laura.


  • SimplyNoodle
    December 24, 2008
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    verry nicley written


  • Fallen-Phases
    December 13, 2008
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    a very sweet beautiful write, magnificent


  • Symphony
    November 22, 2008

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    oh my goodness; why am i not surprised that this has won so many trophies, i was captivated immediately upon first reading the opening verse... it reminds me big time of the verse by Robert Frost, "Two Roads Diverged In A Yellow Wood" - at least, I think that's the title of it.

    I expected the falling pink leaves to be a distraction, but to be entirely honest with you, they actually added to the ambience of the whole page - along with the glowing words, and imagery support.

    Indeed, the words describing imagery was quite unique also, you moved from a gentle day out, to the winds whirling harshly yet all along kept the same gentle tone of promised warmth, love and protection. This was a joy to read - so thank you for entering it!


  • Xx.Toxic.xX
    November 20, 2008
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    very nice, sounds inviting.


  • trekkergirl
    October 24, 2008
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    I think that I have seen this poem before. I remember the hummingbirds and the falling leaves. My mom just loves humming birds. Your poem is a very nice one. Thanks for joining in this contest.


  • chilali
    October 23, 2008

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    This was wow! Great write. This was a delight to read. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • babydollxgonexwrong
    October 23, 2008

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    Wow. Just the word choice was amazing. lol Your use of vocabulary was commendable in this cute little--or not so little--love poem. Very pure and beautiful, a light-hearted poem sure to make anyone smile.

    Thx for entering my contest! :]

    P.S. Your backround is hypnotizing. I spent a while just staring at it!


  • nite stalker
    October 7, 2008
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    beautiful, love, one of the most fickle yoet wonderfull emotions, well done


  • stella187
    October 7, 2008
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    The only way to describe this is bloody brilliant


  • BehindTheShadow
    September 30, 2008
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    A most beautiful write capturing the feelings of the heart. Splendid!


  • Lily of the Valley
    September 30, 2008

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    Love is sharing a complete empathy which this poem expresses so clearly in every aspect. Though it is a topic which has been written about through the ages with success on a personal level or a broader level, to combine the two areas and be successful is no mean feat yet I think this poem does both. Although some may think a ten stanza poem a little long I think this reflects how love makes us feel, that we could write or talk about the one we love forever more. However I also think that each stanza can stand alone in its own right and still provide full meaning for those who prefer a shorter read. This is sweet nectar for all hummingbirds and deserves every trophy it has won and more besides


  • trekkergirl
    September 29, 2008

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    Thanks for putting the option # in the AN. Also, I think that the picture is just adorable. Those humming birds are my moms favorite birds. Your poem is very likeable. Good job!


  • unavailable
    September 6, 2008
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    I love this.


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    August 29, 2008

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    Excellent Composition!

    A most beautiful write with excellent flow of the unforced rhyming verse.
    Abundance of imagery.
    Very well deserving of all previous awards and destined to be awarded more in future entries.
    Well Done!


  • Moonlightdragon gold member
    August 29, 2008

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    excellent

    this truly touches on the imagery of unconditional love.
    It well crafted Thanks for the entry

    Robert


  • fallingangel12
    August 27, 2008

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    Loved it! its really really good! Love the background too and the picture before the poem they tie together with the poem. loved it when you repeated " Draw near, My dear" Its an awesome poem! Keep the great work up! Good job!!!!


  • Fallen-Phases
    August 24, 2008
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    a very lovely and descritive piece, i love the ideas!
    its flawless, great job!
    mlg


  • starblaze
    August 21, 2008

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    Thank you for entering! This is a lovely write flawlessly put together with amazing rhyme and imagery. A very positive and uplifting expression of the formidable power that people in love have over the darkness in the world. Lines that stand out for me are:

    "Draw near, my dear, though woods be cold,
    though nights oppress, together bold"

    "Draw near, my dear, here let us chart
    the way to reach contented heart,"

    "Draw near, my dear, to land of dreams,
    to shadows weaving silver streams"

    Wonderful image on that last one Overall very impressive and enjoyable read. Thank you again for your entry!


  • HereComesTheSun
    July 30, 2008

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    great poem

    i loved the poem but the background and all the little flowers kinda took away from it i couldn't focus on the poem but what i read i liked great job


  • rose petal desires
    May 28, 2008

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    i like this here you really did a great job and i love the falling rose petal that is amazing thanks for sharing


  • ElijahsRaven
    May 26, 2008
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    definately a finalist

    Outstanding work.


  • honey bear
    May 12, 2008

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    thank you for entering and good luck in the contest with this lovely and love filled poem


  • Chanson belle
    May 10, 2008
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    very beautiful
    i love the background
    and the poem is well written
    thanks for entering =]


  • Angelflower
    May 9, 2008

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    Oh this was just so beautifully written!
    The imagery in this was amazing and the
    flow to your words just took the reader along..
    You did a really great job with this write!
    Bravo! best of luck to you..

    Angel


  • Roaddog Wolf
    May 8, 2008

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    this is a marvelous poem

    well written good flow and rhyme scheme is excellent nothing seems forced, just a good write

    Thank you for this entry and good luck in the contest


  • Heath Thompson
    May 7, 2008

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    Yeah I like the back ground too! And this:

    whatever weather harsh would whirl
    about, around, with squall, pall, swirl, -
    churn cream from mist dismissed and rise
    with cheer sight clear, translucent pearl

    nicely penned - thanks for entering


  • Pleasantly Insane
    April 28, 2008
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    I was amused with the background more. lol. I liked it though. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • trista gold member
    April 27, 2008

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    I can't even tell you how lovely I find this entire poem... Despite its length (or maybe because of it) it is beautifully all-encompassing of what so many of us want, need, search for, and even promise. There are other lines smoother (3 rhyming words seems complimentary, 4 seems clunky, awkward...but that's just me. ) and/or more beautifully worded, and yet this line: "to end, lend, spend, send silent speech." struck me most for some reason. I guess the "silent speech" part, which is something I find very sacred in a love relationship.

    Thank you for guiding me here to read this. I have bookmarked and added it to my favorite poems by other poets list, but if for any reason you'd rather it not be in my list please let me know.

    Peace and Blessings,
    ~J.


  • Sorath
    April 17, 2008

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    WOW!! That is all I can say because this was gorgeous and I loved every word of it!! Thanks for the great write!

  • ichigosama
    April 13, 2008

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    ichigosama

    it sounds like you're taking someone special somewhere. is it on vacation? wherever and whatever it is i like it. draw near my dear my song shall charm birds from their trees and disease disarm. thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Midgetbridgey
    April 13, 2008
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    Good poem but i don't care for the repition.


    Goodluck!


  • ReachingForStars
    April 9, 2008
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    I loved this. The repetition made it flow wonderfully. Great write!


  • MartaJay
    April 8, 2008

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    EXCELLENT JOB!! I love the flow of this poem! I can feel the mood of it! This is exactly what this contest was about!


  • HeirOfEnoch
    April 3, 2008
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    Very good rhyme throughout, a very very good love poem
    Good luck in the contest

  • Frodofan
    April 1, 2008

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    "melt wraith fence, difference, - hope’s gleams,"
    ^This line seems a little rough.

    "endeavours, - rainbow links - proposed"
    ^This line seemed a little sappy.

    Otherwise - so compelling! What an excellent scheme and your rhythm is very lovely. I'm trying to figure out what to say exactly, but I think I am slightly overwhelmed by the fact that someone actually entered a metered, rhyming, poem with such a complex scheme and that was relatively long yet still held my attention. Thank you very much for entering.

    This is a delightful poem.


  • fantasysmurf
    January 27, 2008

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    I like!

    The repetition draws out a new chapter for the verses. I enjoyed the thought of a perfect gentleman caring for my every need. It is refreshing to read poetry written by male poets. Im thinking Shakespeare, Keats, and Shelley. Have added you as a favourite.


  • Providence
    August 29, 2007
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    Line after line is just brimming with heart felt devotion!

    Loely indeed.


  • Amanda1
    July 12, 2007

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    Very nice use of imagery to promote feeling. I liked your words thick with emotion. I'm sure you felt wonderful after having all the emotion on page. Keep up the good work!


  • Cannonsfire
    February 3, 2007

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    So much emotion contained with flow of beauty, and feelings that pour forth from the page. A truly masterful write.


  • AngelKissez059
    February 3, 2007

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    very very well done

    VERY VERY WELL DONE! it says so much and theres alot of passion in your writing i think i'll put you on my favorites because this is wonderful. i loved the last stanza becuase it realates alot to happiness my favorite quote in the last stanza is "i sketch wings stretched for future flight". to me this says that someone will fly with courage and strength when they pass.


  • cherche -d -ame
    February 3, 2007

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    this has a breath of fairytale in it (much better than Disney ever did)it sings of birds and fayries and butterflies and breezes, yet there is a reality of melancholy and yearning as well. I guess it is a fairytale for adults that have not lost the ability to dream. (I have not read Sonja's as of yet).There is so much hope in these words,
    reenie


  • klassy lassy
    January 22, 2007

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    "my song shall charm
    birds from their trees, disease disarm,"

    And that it does, your touch of heart, Jonathan... I am enthralled with this...and more!
    ~Karen


  • Sonja
    January 20, 2007

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    I am realy honoured to see that my poetry could be inspiration to somebody else - to other poets, to rewrite it. Today it happend for the second time. This is a great surprise to me and probably it could be the top wish of poet's success. But, in my opinion, I still have to learn and each poet has it's own poetic style and poetic posibilities and of course it's readers. My own poslibilities are still bordered with a lack of English language knowledge.
    Your poem is much different than mine but it brings the same message because the quintessence was the same.
    ~Sonja~

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