Lugubrious
Such dismal sightings from below
Lugubrious
thoughts of failures, ambiguos
Lighting up the flames as they show
dying desires in their glow
Lugubrious
A contest entry
- Rondelet Contest 4 by Billbard.
450 points, ended February 1, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A sad poem my dear Mel...
You have been away for too long now, I hope all is well with you
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Your entry in my Rondelet Contest 4 complied in every way with the Rondelet rhyme and syllable requirements.Thank you very much for your entry and for in a pleasing way making my judging more difficult.Good luck
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Hmm. What an interesting little write we have here. I like how you repeated the word "lugubrious", although I do not know what that could mean. Definitely has a good beat to it. I would have liked to see more repetition with the title word, but then again, it might have made the poem a little off-beat, since it does take some concentration for a good beat. I did favor the beginning four lines, though, very much so.
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