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Summer Rose

The soft
peach petals
sway in the breeze
sharing it's fragarant beauty
with me

A contest entry

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  • Nicolette gold member
    January 20, 2007

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    Peach roses are beautiful indeed - one of my favourite colour roses. The poem, the title and the background blend so well together here. Please just check the syllable count in Lines 2 (I count 3 syllables - must be 4) and Line 3 (I count 4 syllables in stead of 6), as well in Line 4 - must be 8 (you have 7 syllables there). I will come back to see if you have edited this cinquain. Thank you for the entry and good luck in the contest.

    ~ Nicolette