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Bleeding Again

I've read Cosmo, Women's Health, periodicals galore.
I try and understand the plight.
I try to tunnel to the core,
Because, right now, you don't seem quite right.

Support her, and hold her; whisper into her ear.
These articles insist that I "listen"
I still keep my distance; in part due to fear,
And in part, to keep slapping from missing.

I smile and nod, breathe slowly, count to ten.
This isn't you always, you're just bleeding again.








Author notes

This, simply, is my first gut reaction to the term "Bleeding again". I like it. Non one else really has to. Thanks for inspiring me to make myself chuckle on a rather boring day.

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  • O.o
    December 20, 2007

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    Great poem, you have put so much passion and emotion into it, and its paid off, it really puts a picture in your mind.

    Support her, and hold her; whisper into her ear.
    These articles insist that I "listen"
    I still keep my distance; in part due to fear,
    And in part, to keep slapping from missing.

    Great punctation, I love this verse, you chose your words so well Your spelling is great. Sometimes bad spelling and grammar really bring a poem down but your seems perfect. I just can think of a bad thing to say! Tis
    really is fantastic.

    Keep up the good work!


  • Naridill
    December 18, 2007

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    Interesting take on prompt : love it, its humour at its finest and it rubs off nicely.

    Thanks for sharing.


  • BellaD
    December 17, 2007

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    Funny!

    I like funny poems that let us laugh at ourselves. My first husband said that it took him five years to figure out the whole pms thing and another five to convince me of it. I especially liked "to keep slapping from missing". Funny!

  • piccola silver member
    January 24, 2007
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    So...this is a "periodical" LOL. Thanks for the entry..glad you try to do research to help...


    • Jimfre Talbent
      February 7, 2007
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      MY GOD I LOVE A GOOD PUN!

      Thank you for the chuckle. . .and the comment.

  • Overload
    January 22, 2007

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    Again...hahahahahahaha. Shallow ..nah! Your just a man! A man with poetic justice and the balls to write it down. XX


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    January 20, 2007

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    This is so clever and truly unique. Great use of the title. Thanks for sharing and good luck in my contest... x Butterfly.


  • Dalaney gold member
    January 20, 2007

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    smiling...I think you've captured this 'time' with both humor and patience. I like this poem. And, you read Cosmo...wow. Love, Lane


    • Jimfre Talbent
      January 20, 2007
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      Ah Laney, how much I love thee. If only we could meet so we could say everything with glances and nary a word.

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