Are my hands warm?
Wreck me ashore with these
soft glances and I'll dance
for you: blue, green and
yellow - they can watch, but
we aren't really here;
You can say those again, draw
our hearts on the sand, circle
around and wait for the wave
to crash on us: we'll fall
together, I'll hold your hands.
Play under the shadows of
the treehouses where we might
shuffle in when the sun falls
away: no, I'm not asleep-
these roses sing for you;
rest upon these paper hearts
and when you wake
I'll be with you.
Author notes
[Option 5 for Suicide King's contest]
["If I can only have you in my dreams, then I want to sleep forever" for longing to be loved's contest]
[Option 4 for AllAmericanCowGirl's contest]
[Option 2 for --Beautiful--'s contest]
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this is beautiful. i loved how nicely you wrote this and how well the poem flowed off the page. great write!
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Maybe I didn't comment it O_o
Coulda sworn I did! And allpoetry was saying I did but w.e....
Well I thought this was interesting. Short and cute. Not bad, didn't really grab my attention though, but none-the-less, much talent!!!! Good job and good luck!
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a very good poem, but entered into rather alot of contests. i like the way you end it, thank you very much for your entry, and good luck
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Thank you for joining my contest. And putting your option # in the author comments cause lots of people haven't...Thanks for the read it is a great poem ... Good luck!
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I like this poem but it was a little confusing. that's not a bad thing though (: it is very deep. Thanks for the entry.
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excellent
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THis is an intersting poem...Great Job
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Good work
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Thank you for entering! Great write and good luck!
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Oh I loved it!Especially the first bit
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