looking through this looking glass
trying to see what all has passed
I just feel like such an ass
Thinking a friendship that could last
I think and wonder what went wrong
I think it has been me all along
I'm thinking and wondering why isn't anything right
Yet I am still here putting up with this fight
She's a fighter and she's never going to stop
I swear I would go on but this is all I got
All these fights I fought
And the lies I bought
What is real these days?
True love that leaves people in a daze?
And that leaves us confused in so many ways
Or is this just a simple phase?
What happend to simplicity?
Can you help me?
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I totally identify with this, sometimes I feel like it's something to do with me. I think it has more to do with people just want to control people, and when they don't get their way they lie, cheat, and steal to get it never caring who they hurt.
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I like this a lot. It has a lot of meaning in the words. And I relate to it a lot. Great Job!
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i remmeber feeling this way after i graduated highschool, it was really hard from me because i had alot of friends, i lived at my parents and i did everything. afterwards i stopped hearing from everyone i got kicked out of my house i didnt have anywhere to go, i got in a crappy relationship that really sucked. i learned about bills and working hard and labor. i learned about betrayal and pain. i learned about alot of things that i missed in highschool when i still believed things were rosy and all the dreams i believed when i was young. my bestfriend i knew since kindergarden betrayed me in the worst way, i had alot of failures and alot of succeses in my life. theres alot i have learned and im not even that old. but in my eyes a moment goes by in a blink of an eye, and when it does its funny to look back when its only been a short time away. i cant even believe what is going to come in the years of my life as i get older. i miss the simplicity of life. lol
but as they say its easier to let it go by than to take it by the horns i hope you keep your head up! it will get better!!
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its tainted life and tainted love these days. nothing is ever simple. i wrote this ages ago. thank you. you really saw the depth to this. and know that you appreciated reading as wellxx
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aw hun
im sorry i havent read this sooner
srsly
Friends,
especially girls,
can be bitches,
biggggg bitches.
Trust me on this one,
I know.
:]
Im here for you.
Always.
♥
Brandi -
It's a great poem, and I could relate to it. It was a bit choppy, however, and the following line was kind of confusing: "trying to see what all has passed." It just seems... jumbled, if that describes it.
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It does...The confusing line, either jumbled or a bit vague, if not both. This deffinatly isnt my best, but thank you for the comment. That line, think of flashbacks, like the ones you see in movies. Or whatever. Like trying to find the error of one's way, trying to see what you have done wrong and being lost and so annoyed with it.
I didn't know how to put that in there...but that's what i meant.
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Where Is It in the World?
Enjoyed reading great poem Congrats -
an exelent write full of teenage pain, one day befor you know it you will be all grown up
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I remember this!
I remember in High school feeling a lot like this. You are changing and learning so much. Life is beginning to take a form and you are laying the fondation you will build upon. Learn all you can in school and don't give up. Daddy loves you, The Shaker
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PERFECT JOB!
Very well done hun. I love it. Once again, you showed your talent...love it!
Keep Writing & God Bless
~MagicalMoon~
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OMG!!! I loved this!!!! It just has so much truth to it and a realy beautiful message. The questions it ask can be asked be so many people and never get answered. I hope you find the answers you're looking for, and I hope you know that if you ever need some one to talk to I'm here.
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the best help...
this was excellent write for sure. i loved the power that was behind this. it showed the cinfusion and the pain. i know the same feeling. very insane write. i loved it
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it never really existed. we only trained ourselves to believe that simplicity was real. and now once we fall and dont have the stength to get up is when we notice the state of mind is gone.
i love this poem its great it really is. i love the meaning
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Hey good write here I am im a writing block if you couldn't tell it is good to hear from you again this was reall reaal good lol have a good day and keep your head up
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i have to say i like the last 3 stanzas the most. the whole thing is pretty good tho. good job.
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simplicity was an illusion of youth, sadly...nice write
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