I fall broken on the cold wet asphalt,
but know one helps me up.
So tired of being beaten up by life,
while everyone else belittles my pain.
I have too many scars that I can no longer hide,
just too many that time cannot heal.
Tears flow as the silver knife runs across my wrist.
Dishonorable and tragic it maybe,
either way the hurt will end tonight.
Tasting the poison of my own betrayal,
I laugh hysterically as I bleed.
Don't save me leave me here I died years ago,
as my bloody self-betrayal stains my clothing.
The red and silver knife falls to the floor and so do I.
This is my final cure,
my beautiful suicide and the last time I'll ever cry.
Either way the hurt will end tonight.
Author notes
flommux
A contest entry
- Darkness Resurrection by Ninth-Poet.
573 points, ended June 24, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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deeply depthful
This piece is deeply depthful in memories for me as I've felt those sentiments and physical inflictions tormement me.
I like the rawness and believable emotions that flow throughout the entirety of this piece.
-Keep the ink flowing!
-Good luck in the contest!
-Sage of the east!
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beautiful
I really like this one. It's really beautiful. great write. -
Superb!
How wonderfully tormented. It paints a splendid picture of the angst you so obviously felt at the time you wrote this. I love being able to see inside the mind of the author.
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the tone matches so perfectly with the action.
it's magnificently worded. awesome syntax.
i can feel hysteria as i read the lines, the deeper i get into the poenm the more i feel as if i'm the one laughing.
intense.
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Very deep and darkly emotional. Full of hopelessness and pain. A very strong sad write.
Best to you in the contest! -
I have felt that hopelessness. Imagined my blood on the floor. The imagery in this is wonderful. Loved how you referred back to the tool used in you final moments, helped hold it all together. ~amber
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Deeply expressive and powerfully profound. Intense imagery and emotion within. Good luck to you in this contest... x Butterfly.
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a good poem, maybe breaking the lines here in half? all but lines 3, 4 and the last line. i think it would help with the presentation. i wish that you have good luck in this contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Great job! I can relate!! I felt it before. I felt it again just reading it. Awsome!
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