Give me silver, take your seats
the show is about to start
lights down
let's begin, now
curtains lift, opening scene
see a lopsided girl
with a broken dream
lived a life in a ghost theater
every day's a play of pure fiction
strings and marionettes get in the way
shove them aside
the crowd's screaming for you, darling
the crowd's screaming.
she promised her mother
that some day she would make it
her name would blind you
from high, so high
but yet another vision
swirling in a snow globe
was broken by a boy
who watched the white fall
lived a life in a ghost theater
every day's a play of pure fiction
strings and marionettes get in the way
shove them aside
the crowd's screaming for you, darling
the crowd's screaming.
watch out now, here comes that boy
with his head in the gutter
and his feet in the sky
he's an avalanche waiting to breathe you in
and spit you out again
poor lopsided girl couldn't see
dear lopsided girl was like me.
lived a life in a ghost theater
every day's a play of pure fiction
strings and marionettes get in the way
shove them aside
The crowd's screaming for you, darling
the crowd's screaming
The crowd's screaming for you darling.
They're all screaming...
Author notes
option 1, please
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"the crowd's screaming for you, darling
the crowd's screaming."
"watch out now, here comes that boy
with his head in the gutter
and his feet in the sky
he's an avalanche waiting to breathe you in
and spit you out again"
Love love love those lines!!
Great job, thank you for entering and good luck!
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See, this is the sort of poem I wanted when I asked for dark poetry. Well thought out, well put together, well presented.
I liked the whole concept but especially these three lines; "watch out now, here comes that boy/with his head in the gutter/and his feet in the sky"
It's so simple in words but could stand for so many things, thankyou for a truly enjoyable read
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very good
thank you for sharing this very good and hauntingly vivid write with us
good luck in the contest and thank you for entering this very good write
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Nice
well done i really like this piece , it was visual very well worded, also agree that it wasn't straight foreword but that was good. I love this piece you did a great job good luck in the contest!
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Very interesting. It reminded me of this film I saw once (Wolf Girl)....love "he's an avalanche waiting to breathe you in" - great line!
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wow this was really good. You've done an excellent job. I love how it isn't totally straightforward, that makes it interesting. Great job. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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