Now gather 'round
while I tell the tale,
the tale of a man
named Bubba.
It's an epic story
of love and conquest,
life and desire...
aw, heck, here we go!
Bubba was an ambitious man.
You could see it in the
mid 90s maroon Chevy truck
he drove around town.
He had a drive...
literally, a drive
to take his car around
so all could see.
Bubba was an ambitious man.
You could see it in the
bright orange straps
securely attached
to either side of the
truck's bed...
he was a man who knew
that trucks were meant
for haulin'.
You could see his drive
in the broken left brake light
and the lowered
tailgate.
This man had a dream...
to use his truck
for every purpose
under the sun.
It wasn't a question
whether he would
go after something or not;
Bubba always ran
headlong after everything
his heart desired.
Bubba had a dream,
a dream, some would say
is impossible
for a big man
in a black ski cap
with unruly hair
truckin' down the highway
to achieve.
But, as you drove by his truck
to pass his left side,
you'd note that ambition
was something Bubba
could not ignore.
And that you would see
as you glanced at the
bright blue door,
testimony to the
obvious bang-up job
he'd done on his first,
unlucky door.
Yet, through all this,
Bubba's drive never failed,
ambition never ceased.
And as you really looked closely
at the murky back windows,
you'd see where Bubba's true ambition lay.
For on the left side,
in big white letters,
he proclaimed to the world
his pride in his name:
"Bubba!"
And on the right,
using his own private advertisement,
Bubba silently sent out
a simple personal ad:
"Your name here."
Perhaps not effective,
but definitely different,
Bubba's ambition
grabs your attention.
To end my exploration
into Bubba's character,
I have one last question
that you must answer,
"Do you have the drive
to find your name replacing
'Your name here' on
poor Bubba's window?"
You'll have to catch him
if you want to try.
Author notes
This was literally based on a true experience of mine. Hope you enjoyed!
A contest entry
- Corkscrew Poetry by Baahltres.
500 points, ended January 29, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Really, now, how stupid was this? Twisty enough?
Comments
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Finally something able to keep my attention without causing me to pause. It was like a story being unwound for me to learn of and to know it was based off of something real, just blows me away. Great write and keep up the amazing work.
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Hey, thanks for your comment! I'm so glad you enjoyed the story and that you were taken in from the beginning. It's good to know I can write a story that draws people in. Anywho, it was definitely an intriguing experience... all I can say is that I always wish that I'd see "Bubba" again so I can laugh some more!
Thanks again for your comment!
-Rae
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This is great Rae.You've done a great job on this write.I loved every word of it.Hats off to you for this brilliant write....
God Bless You
Josh
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Josh, thanks for the comment! I'm glad you liked the poem. It was fun to write even though it was hysterically funny to experience. Anywho, thanks again for the comments and the applause!
God bless,
-Rae
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This is very interesting and to know that it is based on a true experience, is quite extraordinary! Thank you so much for entering and good luck!!!
~.~Yvonne~.~
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Hey sis! Thanks for holding such a great contest! I enjoyed entering it. And yes, sadly this is definitely based off a true story. But it was so much fun to write. I'm glad you liked the story/poem, and thank you for the comments!
Much love,
-Rae
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Wow Rae I really loved this. The flow was great. I just kept reading and wasn't halted at any place because the story was so strong. My reading was concentrated on this and moved really well.
Good luck with this in the contest
Gaylenes
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Yay! Thank you for the sweet comments, Mum! They are much appreciated! I'm so glad you liked the story. I've missed you lately, but I've been so busy. Oh well. Anywho, thank you again for the sweet comments and the applause!
Much love,
-Rae
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i agree with Shattered Logic about Flow
but the story is amazing
i love it!
i missed you
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Aw, I figured the flow would be a bit off, but I was just trying to get the story out of my head in poem form. It was bound to have a few probs. LOL. I'm so glad you liked the story, sis; it was hilarious to experience and fun to write! Thanks for the comment and the applause!
Much love,
-Rae
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hey Rae
nice write, log but hold the reader. Nice imagery, a little rhyme, the only thing that i saw wrong with the piece is the flow is a little off a few spots here and there that make you stop and then go, other than that really nice job. Good luck in the contest
---Ryan---
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Hey thanks, bro! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I had fun writing it, but I wasn't really writing for clarity's sake, so I can understand the flow issues you found. Thanks for pointing them out! Again, I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for the sweet comment and applause!
Much love,
-Rae
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