I wish I can say I had friends,
but I can't.
I wish I could say I was popular,
but I can't.
I wish I could say I was well liked,
but I can't.
I wish I can say people invite me out,
but I can't.
I can say I know many people.
They all have busy lives.
Too busy even to pick up a phone.
Having a good time while I'm at home.
A friendship is only convienent
when it is something they want.
Fair weather friends are in this year.
Sent to the goodwill like a hand me down.
No one is into charity this year.
Out with the old and in with the new.
Like a beat up old car
traded in for a new model.
Why would anyone want me?
I have only given my love,
my friendship and my loyalty.
I must be a real lemon.
I wish I can say, I'm lonely.
I wish I can say, I need you,
but I can't say any of those things
because you abandoned me and left me
..... Alone ......
In a list
A contest entry
- Friends by silent pain17.
550 points, ended January 20, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP Best of the Best Season Three Preliminary by B Chandler.
300 points, ended March 15, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Silver To Gold- For Trophys That Shine Members Only by Mercury Rising.
600 points, ended July 24, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Glad you got an HM in this contest too - way to go again. Congrats.
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This is a great poem that I think alot of people can relate too, very good!
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Nice one, my lady. Then again...aren't they all? Whatever the case, I liked this one.
If it happens to be your personal feelings, hop in my IM anytime. Always around for a friend. Though it does seem that friendship is something of a lost art.
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Congrats on making it to the next round of the Best of AP Season Three. We both moved on - commented on this one before, when you won the silver trophy. Way to go this time too.
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Hi there!
Excellent poem. Absolutely wonderful. When I was younger, I could totally relate to this poem. You've written it very well and the emotions are strong. One thing though. One of my rules was for you not to have won a trophy. You've won a silver trophy, putting you out of the contest here. I'm sorry. But I am going to have to disqualify you. Sorry! Kassie -
In this poem there is a lot of emotion expressed, and expressed well apart from when you say 'i wish i can' which said correctly would be 'i wish i could' but it is still a very well written poem with a lot of heart good work!!
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I am speaking in the present, could would imply the future. I think it reads fine the way it is and apparentyl the judge of the contest did to because I got a trophy.
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I've known a lot of people in my lifetime, but very, very few of them have been what I consider to be "true friends". And even those who were good friends did not always remain in my life. As we grow, so (hopefully) do our friends, but not always in the same direction as us. The friendship fades away over time, but that doesn't mean it wasn't real or wonderful while it lasted.
If you are a very social person who wants to go out with groups of people, I know it can be hard to find that right group. If, on the other hand, you can be content with even one "true" friend, you'll find there are plenty of rewards there too.
I find this poem very sad and can see this has taken quite a toll on your self-confidence. I don't think it is necessarily a problem with who you are, so much as that you just haven't found that right person or group to fit in with. Congrats on the silver win. A lot of people can relate to a poem like this, and I hope some of the wonderful comments you've received have made you feel not quite so alone.
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3 claps...9pts
Reward from The Poetic Bandits reading list
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Excellent...
A very sad write but you know, you do have friends on here, I for one are one of them, we probably will never actually meet but it's the next best thing, I think you are great, and I enjoy your poetry very much, that is something you do for yourself and not for anyone else, as dragonsear has said to try and do
Congratulations on the silver...this made me feel sad along with you but it is dramatically written with a lot of emotion carried through your lines and stanzas, great continuity throughout, and although meloncholy a joy to read
Love and smiles
~Lilac
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I already went down that road and it is a lonely road. I am tired of being by myself and no matter what I do, it doesn't do any ounce of good. I mett people and then they will leave and forget about me. People are just way too busy to keep up friendships. I can't find anyone who has enough in common with me and who even want to stick around long enough to form any true friendship. I am tired of puttijng out all my energy and effort on people who take and don't give back.
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I can honestly say that that was not only a great read, but a reality check. You are right about all the things you said. And I hope you remember that there are those few friends who ARE there. and even though they may lead a busy life, they still care. I liked the style of this poem...also each word you chose had seemed to fit just so...I like your work very much. Thanks!
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I find it hard to belive my "friends" who are so busy have any thought of me.
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I'm not sure why this makes me mad, but it does. I think it's because I know so many people who feel this way and soemtimes I feel that way too. But it's not the truth in most cases. It's just a momentary feeling and sometimes that feeling reers its ugly head too often. I want to say to these folks, find something you like to do by yourself that gives you absolute pleasure that doesn't need to be validated by anyone else. That's why I paint. I paint, draw, write, etc, for me and only for me. IF someone else enjoys it, great. I can be by myself and it's a chosen choice. True freinds are hard to come by that's why I treat mine like gems. Truthful and honest write. I love the vulnerable feel here.
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This is not a momentary feeling and I am sorry my poem makes you mad. It isn't like I am not trying to make friends. People just have way too busy lives. How can you consider people friends when they don't have the time of day for you? They don't call, unless they want something from you. I am tired of others labeling me as a social outcast. I also know you can't live your life alone. I am glad you can live with your solitude.
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Oh this is so sad and holds alot of emotions deeply touches the heart great writing and congrads on the silver...
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utterly depressing piece expect for the
'I must be a real lemon.'
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The feeling of loneliness in this poem is so strong...it describes what many people suffer, being alone, while being surrounded by potential friends.
Expressive write!
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adversity shows us who are true friends really are----- i think the concept of 'fair-weather friends' is something that everyone can really relate to. i liked this poem, it's just very honest and the tone of acceptance is something that shows some of the emotional power of the author. i didn't read this as complaining or whining, it just felt like you were stating the truth.. well done
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Excellent
Many can relate to your words, They do ring true. So many in the world just out for what they can take and move on. But yet there are stilll many who are so lonely that would crave the friendship of a true, I have your back, here for you Friend.. Great Job on this write, the revealing the emotional undercurrent of a lonely soul. Congrads on your placement. Well Deserved.
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The sad thing is I can relate to it
It seemed true and perfectly placed
I felt all the lonely words I've felt
And feel a lot
I just loved the emotions you could feel in ti
And echoing scielence
Well done
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Such heart wrenching sadness in these lines, Lady Altheia. The pain of loneliness is overwhelming and you brought that to the page vividly. Congrats on the shiny silver trophy for this piece! I knew you had it in ya!
~Lori
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Sometimes people are just ignorant jerks! Every "can" in the "I wish..." lines should be "could."
Very sad, but I can relate. Luckily it's a big world and more than likely you'll pass all the stupid people up.
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I think it could go either way with the can could thing so I am going to keep it can.
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O WOW!!
I loved this poem- i can so very easily relate to this one cos it reminded me how i was a few years back.
The emotions involved in the poem was raw and powerful- just the kind of poem which i like!!
you did a wondeful job on this one, keep it up!
Love,
Neera
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This is really sad, and you can really feel the loneliness and almost bitterness in it. the line 'I must be a real lemon' really didn't sit well with the rest, it was just too colloquial a comparison to fit with the rest I feel, but it's your poem.
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This was terribly sad, but a good read none-the-less! I think these emotions and feelings are some that we all have to deal with from time to time! Best wishes,
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I find this to be really sad. I understand these emotions, I think we all experience them sometimes...Pity parties. I think what it comes down to is we just have to learn to love ourselves. If someone is abandoned there is a lesson to be learnt. Possibably to learn to be whole & complete within ones self. To be independent instead of codependent. This poem has great emotional expression and is well crafted. Great Job! an emotional release is felt through this poem...
Peace
Debbera
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Powerful
This is very powerful and I can relate. I love the use of your metaphors and the hint of sarcasm that brings this poem to life. I agree with you, it seems like now-a-days if you don't have anything that someone wants at the moment then you are out until you do. That message is clear. I hope that things change for the better soon and realize that you can't just go out and buy good friends. Those come with years of work and loyalty.
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Thank you I aprreciate your comments. I write on how i feel so I have many poems like this.
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Thank you Mommy, This has become my social life for the last five months. My one friend said I am not missing much but I beg to differ. I am missing everything.
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So sad
You really touched my heart with this lovely poem.
I feel for you and understand 100%, I often say the same things to myself. You deserved this trophy with a wonderful poem. I am so proud of you.
hugs n love - Mommy
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Congratulations on winning silver in this contest. Way to go. Two trophies in one day - that makes it all worthwhile. You're on a roll.
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Aww this is so sad, and I can't totally relate to this... I feel the same way
Thanks for sharing this very good write, keep up the great work!
Annie
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Wow!!!
Melts the heart. It's kind of sad.....sad that things like this actually happen to many of us. Much of the things, infact all that you have put together are really true. Great write! -
A lovely heartfelt write. A sad lament on friendship. Good flow and tone. Lovely expression of feeling. Good word choice. Nice alliteration. You express your thoughts of fair weather friends and being alone. Congratulations on winning Silver.
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Thanks Shelley, I appreciate your comments. I had had bad experiences with friendships and I can't seem to keep any for long periods of time.
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I like the line 'fair weather friends are in this year' . . . my mum always used to give me advice about people like that . . . it took me ages to work out what she was talking about.
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What a sad heartfelt write you have penned here. Feel the hurt and disillusionment in these lines. Just how much can one give, and why do others forget so soon? Friends are not real friends unless they come around more often than the ones mentioned in this poem. Busy year, but not even to pick up a phone is a bit much.
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It is unfortunately true. I put out more effort trying to stay in touch with them than they have.
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Good point, and great repition that doesn't make a bad drag. Unfortunately, all to real. I like your contrasts with ideas, such as what is in style and why anyone would want you. Very nice
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you sound pretty lonely but writing is good for the heart. I have a party tonite you are invited Love and blessings xx
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I love it.. so filled with emotion..
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as I read this I was thinking, dang, I sure hope this is for a contest and not how she really feels, then I get to the end and see that in fact it is for a contest. The sentiments you expressed in this are very real for many people a sad fact of life. I think this piece will touch alot of souls, might even make a few pick up a phone and take a "second chat" at a friendship lost in the shadows. A very strong message you have penned here MY FRIEND!
Love,
Suzi
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I'm with ya....
I really like this its well done, and its true. The people who want friendship go and find friends and then they give up on us, all to quickly. Great write! and I give it three thumbs up...I mean two.
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Love it, I can really relate to this poem keep up the awesome writing!
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Very Moving
A lot of sadness and pain in this piece. I thought you expressed yourself very well and told of how you feel. There are a couple of words that are misspelled. Other than that I thought this was very moving. Many Blessings to you, FAH
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i can really simpathize with the message here. good friends are hard to come by. spending the day waiting for a phone call gets old fast. good luck with finding some real friends.
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ok the poem is ok,, but lucks srong wording,, 10 ponts for the massage,, is was real and from your heart,,stronges part of this poem was,,No one is into charity this year.
Out with the old and in with the new.
Like a beat up old car
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I can totally understand where your coming from, I have a couple of friends who don't really want to do anything with me unless it benefits in some way to them, like giving them a ride, ect. ect. hope you find a way to stand out, and speak up, cause we all need to voice our thoughts, one way or another.
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A few clumsy touches conspire to trip this poem up. I like the rhythm of the first to verses, and the echo of it in the last verse. May I suggest double-checking it for typographical errors? - after which I hope it does well in the contest, because it does have the ring of sincerity.
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wow. this was deep. good luck
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It came to me yesterday and your contest was perfect.
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Awe sis this is so sad and I am sorry that you feel this way. I could feel your pain and sadness throughout your write. I am so sorry that I am so busy with jasmine. She's two and she is very high maintinance. I do love and care about you. Good luck in the contest
Theresa
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