Am I a failture.
For failing in school.
Or because i try.
To try my damdist.
Does it make a differents.
Does it matter if i try.
Even if i dont pass.
Why cant i anser these questions.
Are they ment to be ansered.
Can you anser them.
Can you help me.
Does it mean im stupid.
does it mean theres no help.
I really dont think so.
But do you.
Do you see.
What i can see.
Do you asked.
What i have asked.
Do you feel trapped.
Well i do.
Help me.
Help all of us.
Please anser us dear God.
A contest entry
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Please tell me what you think
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Failture means?
nice write
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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Sure you had errors, but everyone makes mistakes. I could clearly understand your plea because it was able to shine through even with spelling errors. No big deal. Anyway, I think you need to just believe that you are every bit as good as everyone, and if you try, that's all anyone can ever ask.
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ugh i feel your pain. great job
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I think spell check would be your friend-- theres almost a spelling error in every line. Too bad that it does not do puncuation as well... The message you were trying to send out did not exactly show due to all the grammatic errors. Your title is also spelt wrong. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I could tell that you were sincere in your quest for answers in this poem. However, almost every line had a misspelled word, and I could hardly understand the pleas you were sending out. Also, it is unnecessary to end each line with a period, especially when asking a question or splitting a sentence over two or more lines. This makes the poem difficult to read. It's like starting a car and then stalling it repeatedly. Overall though, I could tell you made an effort. Nice job.
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This is really good. I liked the way you kept asking questions. Also, it was really cool the way the questions can pertain to everyone and their emotions. Great job.
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This is a very strong poem...with a lot of question that can be answer just ask them to your self....Good job and good luck!
~Angel~ -
Hmm..
Life is a great struggle, but it doesn't have to be. Believe in yourself, and things can only get better!!
Well done! This is a wonderful and honest poem.
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This is a wonderful write of expression of doubt, fear and yet hope with the help of the lord. One only fails if they fail to try. Good write.
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This is very sad and I am sure you're no failure. Rest assured, people with no qualifications in education can do very well. Sometimes it's more important to have life experience.
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Humbling
The issue here I am not fully aware of outside the fact of the difficulty expressed in your poems and home page. It reminded me of what I heard as a teenager: "I cried for new shoes until I saw a man with no feet". On one hand a person has to live life with the tools that were given. On the other hand we can be happy to make baby steps to progress, one at a time. Giving to ourselves that acheivement of value we possess with each goal met. I have an Autistic 15 year old boy, Jeremiah, who with the dedicated efforts of my wife, one aide, and I, have reached goals no one ever thought he would attain. My prayers and hopes for you is to realize that you must want it bad enough to be satisfied with baby steps and liking yourself for the progress. Not knowing everything about your situation, I want you to know that someone out here does care about you and your intrappment. Love and Prayers, your friends, Don & Karen
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