You think that you're the only one?
Who's tried to save my soul?
Oh, many try, but all will quit
'Coz failure takes its toll
You call me names and I pretend
That I could still stand tall
I remain a goddess here
Of nothing much at all
I'm complex, simple, so afraid
I'm lonley, happy there
I'm sultry,useless and fucked up
And shit, i just don't care
I love the way you think you know
The way I am designed
You really have no fucking clue
You can't predict my mind
Even though you think you know
the way that I should be
I laugh and spin away again
And what I trust is me
I laugh at those i do not like
I ignore those i dread
You know my funeral? Youll' be there
But just to check I'm dead
A contest entry
- Your best prewrite by glazecovered.
300 points, ended February 23, 2004, 274 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thats a really amazing poem, reminds me alot of the '10 things i hate about you' thing or the taming of the shrew thing.
It was very powerful and a great write. 
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STRONG!!!
oOoOo... very strong. dont give that up. also the rhyming makes it flow well, and it definately doesnt sound forced. very inspiring read.
~notte -
congrats on the trophy...this is an excellent write...i loved it. the flow was great, and i liked the cussing, because it made it better. it reminds me of how i feel sometimes. awesome rhyme...great write. thanks for sharing.
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I believe you have hit the nail on the head so to speak. This poem epitomizes what each and every one of us wishes we could say, yet a lot find they can not. Beautifully rendered and very heart felt. You definitely deserved the bronze on this one.
Excellent piece!!!
Alimae -
excellent! this is an extraordinary poem and you most definately deserved the bronze. congratulations!!!
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Congratulations on the contest. You did a great job.
Queen
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Yes yes yes
OMG I can so relate. You are a gifted writer keep up the amazingly fantastic work. This was entertaining. I absoulutly love it love it love it. fantastic job and to capture something so real I am bookmarking this. I love it. Good luck in the contest.
Shine,
Baby Star -
I enjoyed this piece very much, I could see these thoughts running through my head, for this piece very much relates to my life. I love the rhyming it was really...for the lack of better word - it was good. Great job! Thank you for entering and good luck.
~Anastasia -
I think this is a good write but it could use just alitte bit of work. No disrespect to you or anything like that keep writing and always share your poetryfriend
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Sorry to read all the hurt in this piece, though it sure was well expressed, and abundantly clear that you are done with these people.
Hope the best for you, it is hard to trust these days, though I hope you do again, for when we love, also comes trust.
Thanks for sharing this, your rhyme here rocks, great job!!!
-Timothy -
Another great one. This is how I feel to. I've found that those trying to 'save my soul' are mostly hippocrites. They are backstabbers and liars. They only talk about people behind their backs and would never admit to saying the things they say to your face. Hold your head high and be you!
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