Driving a lonely winding road
Along the ocean coast
Alone amidst the darkness
Guided only by headlights
Suddenly the sounds of music
The glowing of party lights
A gazebo full of people
Dancing in the moonlight
Slowing to take a look,
A pretty lady waves to me
I pull along the roadside
Curious what she may need
As I approach she asks
“Will you dance with me please?
The music is softly playing
A slow song meant for two”
Everyone else has paired off
Flattered I happily oblige
As we move around the dance floor
With pleasure I gaze into her eyes
I ask “why did you stop me”?
Coyly she whispers in my ear
“Maybe a little later my secret I’ll reveal”
We talk and dance through the night
And as it slowly shades to grey
I beg to see her again
She laughs, kisses me sweetly
With a look of pleasure, she says
“Should you wish to see me
Come back tomorrow night”
I gaze back at her with pleasure
Then in shocked surprise
With the coming of the day
She faded right before my eyes
In a list
A contest entry
- Shades of Night (CONTEST) by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended February 5, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hmmm...I'm starting to think that you put memories into your poem alot, I could be way of but it's kinda intriguing. Another nice piece, with alot of sensual flow to it.
It also kind of reminds me of a sort of urban legen hitch hiker story.
ok...anyways enough babbling. Best wishes
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I do use alot of memories in my poem but I can honestly say I have never met a ghost!
So this one was pure imagination! I'm glad you enjoyed it! 
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this almost feels like something out of the twilight zone, written like a script it would for sure be a great scene to shoot, enjoyed this my friend, good luck in the contest...you know who
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Hi fader, This was a beautiful poem. I guess your lady slipped through your fingers. POOF!!!! Now you see her, now you don't. A lovely ghost story that alot of us wish would be true. Nothing more romantic then dancing under the moonlight with someone you just met..... Even if it is with a ghost. Well you take care and enjoy the rest of this beautiful day. Again, it is so nice to meet you.
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Awww, was your lady love only a dream - you know what they say...if you wish for something long and hard enough your wish will come true.
Hey one bit of advice though before i go - drive with your high beams on - you wouldnt want to flatten her should it ever come to pass
Kinda makes dancing difficult when you have to drag and hold up your partner...
Reads like a classic fader with a whimsical dream like quality, I love it that your muse is so active - throw some my way
galf
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Gal I love your comments! They are great fun! This was written with an old fashion ghost story theme. I am waiting to see how many pick up on it. He must go back night after night to see her as she fades with the coming of day. As for my muse you can borrow it if it would help. Its been in overdrive lately!
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This is really good
I loved the ending
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Thank you for your kind words! I will take all the help I can get!
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OOh... I like the suspenseful ending! This held my attention from beginning to end. I felt almost as if I were reading an excerpt from the type of book I would buy. I love the inspiration you drew from the contest title and the quote. This is a great entry and I savored every word. Thank you for entering and good luck!
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Thanks Touchof1der! You like those romantic ghost story type books.I was wondering if people would pick up on the twist at the end.
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