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Whispers

The image in the glass, so dirty and unkempt

He sees her ev'ry day, to love her- His attempt.

She thinks she's not worthy, then turns away to grieve

As He whispers softly: "My child, life will deceive".


The image screams so clear "I'm ugly and undone"

Yet faintly seen is the blurred vision of a gun.

Her cries are not unheard that built up through the years

Then He whispers softly: "I'll dry up all your tears".


Frustrations bottled up, those borne from grief and pain

Basic acts of living have grown to be a strain.

It's easy now to hide; she'd rather just be gone

Gently now He whispers: "You'll never be alone".


And as He lifts His hand to simply touch her life

She throws it to the side and firmly grasps the knife

That stands for all the times she wanted just to die

Still staring at the glass she simply mutters... why?

"My child, I love you so", He whispers in her ear,

"Allow me now to help, for I will calm your fear".



My Child, life will deceive

I'll dry up ev'ry tear

You'll never be alone

For I will calm your fear.



And found is strength to live another day or two

The knife now thrown away; death, for a time, is too.

She's gained the strength to smile and as she turns to go

He whispers yet again; "My Child, I love you so".

 


01-18-2007

Author notes

People who have been abused struggle with self image... it's a fight to like yourself... to see yourself as anything good... to see yourself as an actual person.

When I peer into the mirror... it's never a good thing because the person looking back at me 'speaks' one simple word... reject. A person abused usually sees the abuse as a type of rejection.

This poem IS how I struggle... but I am learning to see myself through the Eyes of another... one who loves unconditionally... and if I can see myself through His eyes then maybe one day I will like myself...

One question though... does the period go AFTER quotation marks or before?

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  • Iron Saint
    November 12

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    Very Deep

    I sense a lot of pain and anguish in this piece. I can relate. I am honored by the comments you made on my poetry and it gives me joy that my work has such a profound and positive effect on others. God bless you Sister! And if you would care to receive a poem a day from me as an E-mail please E-mail me at ironsaints1@gmail.com and request the Breadline. I have about 260 people on it right now and they love to start each day with what God has given me to share with them. Maybe we can break through that brick wall together Sister!
    Grace and Peace to you and yours
    Love James


  • Gods child40 silver member
    September 19

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    I'm s sorry you had to go through so much pain. God is a restorer! He will heal you and you will use this siuation to bring glory to his name. Very heartfelt!


  • Endeavor gold member
    January 21, 2007

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    Excellent

    The expression of your anquish is just beautifull

    I am very aware of the pathology of the abused
    the syndrones that are so typicle in the behavor.

    I dred that you still acces your self in any way
    by ancient history. Our vality as a person is
    much more realivent to our acts and deeds than
    any subjective measurement of estetics by you
    or anyone elce. I would almost bet most view you
    as a good to great person. Because you are indeed.

    Join the club and believe

    Again, wonderfull painfull expression in words.

    Rick


  • ShelleyA gold member
    January 20, 2007

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    Hi Melissa. A heartfelt write and message dear one. Very good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Deep expression of emotion. You capture your feelings so vividly in this piece... and yet you hear the supportive voice in this special conversation as the Lord reaches out to you with His love. Shelley


    • Molassis
      January 20, 2007
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      Hey sweetie, thanks for your comments...

      This was written from feelings of long ago... and it's so easy to look back and see His touch in my life now... though I might not have seen it so clearly bak then... He's the only reason I'm still alive today...

      Thanks so much for your comments dear one!

      I love ya!

      ~Melissa


  • panegyric ink
    January 20, 2007
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    I can feal the frustration!! Great going on this one!!!


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    January 20, 2007

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    This is beautiful, I think I was a lot like that, way back when.... you captured the emotion so well in this piece I hope you've done well in the contest... tis a winner for sure

    Karen


  • individuality gold member
    January 19, 2007

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    a good piece though having the author notes, so much anyway just takes away from the poem - let your poem speak! spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • January 18, 2007

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    excellent write

    This was another great poem. I am sorry to hear that this is a struggle for you. I myself can relate, as a person of self injury and self image problems. one thing i have found that has helped me more than anything is someone to talk to and someone who understands. in your afternote where it says:I am learning to see myself through the Eyes of another... one who loves unconditionally... and if I can see myself through His eyes then maybe one day I will like myself... the lord is the best person to turn to, for he loves all his children for everything they are. best wishes in the contest and beautiful write


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    January 18, 2007

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    Melissa,
    My Dear Angel, you have released so much pain and anger through this write, and that my beautiful niece, is another step on the road to peace in your heart. Yes, we too have spoken plainly regarding some sad parts of history, but as I said then, and will again now, your existance here with us, doing the job you do so carefully, is a gift to others who unknown to you, will be glad you are who you are, and in that, will see the beauty that stands and cares before them. More so, you are dearly loved and admired by your family at home, and here on AP, so in times of uncertainty, you only need to ask, we will all come running to your side with support and the love you so deserve. Your finding of love in the eyes of the lord, will be your biggest reward for standing strong through all your troubles, and that is the most important part you need to hold onto.
    but like so many others who have you in their hearts and thoughts, I am proud to know you as you today, and know our years to come will be just as important.

    you just stay strong, keep smiling, and oh, another thing, buy a new mirror, cause the one you have must be defective and doesnt reflect the real you.
    love always

    Uncle Mike. xx


  • heismysong
    January 18, 2007

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    Answer: Before! :D

    Molassis Gal, I can't wait to see the day when you write poems of victory over the many things you struggle with.

    Two verses came to mind as I read this. One was Psalm 139:14- "I will praise thee, for I am fearfully and wonderfully made..." Another verse which I can't remember the reference to says that we are "accepted in the Beloved."

    Claim the promises of Scripture, my friend- take them as your sharp sword and thrust them in the devil's face and through his heart. God doesn't lie- He made you WONDERFUL, and He ACCEPTS you no matter what!

    For His Glory,
    heismysong


  • Puppydog gold member
    January 18, 2007

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    WONDERFUL EMOTION!!!!!!!

    I felt this exact same way when I was with my ex the last two years we were together. Now, seven years later I am starting to feel some of the old confidence come back, I do know how you feel and even though there are some that say that women cannot do that to men I am an honest to goodness example that they can.


  • Frogzter gold member
    January 18, 2007

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    Giving you a standing ovation for this one seester! It is so true and so elegantly written... it pulled at my heartstrings while I read! I live in the same world as you my dearest friend and you couldn't have got it more dead on than this! Bravo! I love ya so much and we are two peas in the same pod! Thanks for this one!
    Blessings, hugz and unconditional love!
    Seester Frogz~


  • Theater Of Dreams
    January 18, 2007

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    Peace find you...

     Melissa

    Takes courage to pour out your soul, in order that others may see...and I hope your words both serve as inspiration to others, and to help you cope yourself.

     No one knows you...better than you. Except for God. It must be tough when so MANY admire you...love you, and yet that MIRROR still screams 'reject!' Your wounds are deep, and there is nothing I can tell you...nothing to really comfort you, except if you need a friend...please write me. I am serious. We've had some deep talks, and I miss them...and I know you play the tough-part well. It is no sin to 'need' a friend. Just remember that.

     I admire your continued relationship with God. Together- that will break the illusions of the mirror, and you will see yourself in glowing perfection.

     I am proud to know you. You are a survivor, a trooper, and a very kind Lady.

     Yeah...I said that...Laughing

    -James.


    • Molassis
      January 18, 2007
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      Thanks James, you are a dear friend and I know that if I really need you... you'd be there for me... that's comforting to know... I appreciate your friendship...

      It's all good ya know?

      ~Melissa


  • M0ofi3
    January 18, 2007

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    Love it, sis...

    ...your realness is your beauty.

    And yet I know my words may seem nice for a while, and then you have to turn to the Lord who resides within to help you see what He has done and is doing with you. He alone can only impress upon one to see what they need to see about themselves. There's no better Teacher than Him. I'd rather have you listen to Him than myself anyway. His view of all things is the only thing that should stand. Truth is devoid of opinion or partiality, yet Truth knows what He has done.

    Appreciate the write greatly! Luvyaz!


    • Molassis
      January 18, 2007
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      Thanks dear brother... He's working and I'm fighting... per the usual... but it's all good and I'm ok... I'll always be ok no matter what comes to the surface...

      Thanks...

      ~Melissa


  • troyias
    January 18, 2007

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    AMAZING

    Melissa you have a heart that has known so much pain and as a result God will use that reality to rach ot to others tha have no strength of their own. Through you He will touch them. This is an amazing write that is filled with such truth and reality in the pain of life and the hope of God. You are an amazing instrument of God, and there is a beauty and love there that can be found in no other. Because God made you unique and so very very special.

    *Go With God* my sweet little sister ,

    Valerie

    The period goes after. (I think)


    • Molassis
      January 18, 2007
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      Valerie, thanks for reading this... and for your comment...

      I have gone through much less than some others... but hurt and pain is ... well... the same whether suffered once or many times... I am thankful that it wasn't worse... it easily could have been.

      I am just thankful that I am 'mentally stable' and that God has helped me... for if it had not been for Him... I would not have lived upon this Earth too long at all... it's only by His grace and mercy that I continue to live... and although my past is HARD to deal with... I am thankful that I have Him, who takes every step that I take.

      God bless you sweetie... I am thankful for the encouragement that you gave me just now... maybe one day I'll be an un-broken vessel used by Him... but until then I remain ... cracked...

      God bless you ... much love to you as well...

      ~Melissa


      • troyias
        January 18, 2007
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        Just a thought. When you put a candle in a vessel that is perfect and put the lid on it, the light goes out.

        But when you put a candle in a vessel that is cracked and then put the lid on the light shines out and continues to burn.

        Christ is the Light, you are the vessel, He will shine throught you. It is His Will

  • LIve For Today
    January 18, 2007
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    great poem , and i have been thu this and i know how it feels

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