Cradled in arms
of blood and lust,
stood something profound
Mannerisms of hearsay billowed
from point to point--silence into
whispers, yet all formalities
of present time; absorbed momentums
trapped seamlessly
While two strangers in
this unquivering embrace
speak in only ways they
can understand--lovers bewitched
Lost to repition, this
tempest-like puppet stared
underneath a graying lunacy
rethinking the bliss easily
shared
A contest entry
- Shades of Night (CONTEST) by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended February 5, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like the bewitching aura surrounding the night here. I think you added extra flavor to the poem with your word choices. Nice work. I appreciate you taking the time and making the effort to enter my contest. Thank you and good luck!
♥ Touchof1der
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i aim to disturb lol
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there is something about this poem i can't quite placed, that makes it seemed a little forced, i think you did a great job, but there is just something about it, maybe i am wrong, i like it thou, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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