As the tears run down her face
The fear in her eyes multiply
The hurt shown to me
Eats away at my heart
I now fear the worst
The one last breathe
Falls from her lips
The love left in her heart
Gone...
What she had with him
Gone...
Soon enough
I'll be there
And make things fair
She is gone
And so will he...
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- But we flew to far away from Neverland... by Dawliah.
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Comments
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This poem leaves me guessing, but wanting more. Some odd wording first-off with:
"The fear in her eyes multiply"
But it's not distracting enough.
Nicejob.
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love it!! Word play is beautiful
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me likey! very good indeed, it flows rather nicely and i can feel the emotion comming off the page. well done
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