It seems like just yesterday
He was here with me
Along by my side
Playing with me
Begging and crying
for me to come along
but I was to frightened
To scared and not strong
If only I listened
If I just went along
He'd be here right now
With me and my mom
But, no
I didn't listen
I went with my instincts
How foolish I was
I hate myself
for leaving him alone
I'll always regret
him going to the haunted house
alone
I wish he was here
He 'd have one more chance left
but wishes don't come true
at least one about a theft
I hate the man
that killed him
He tortured his soul
in all of his ways
Why did he do it?
Why did he, why?
Perhaps he had a temper
Perhaps he was sly
I wish I could hurt
the guy who killed him
but no, he's in jail
a far place away
now I must weep
every day of my life
For it's no longer me
Or my brother's good life.
A contest entry
- Give me something to feel and be inspired with...~ by layla..
385 points, ended January 21, 2007, 22 entries
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I am so sorry for your life. I know it isn't much comfort that he is in jail. At least he still has his life. Thank you for sharing.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Very sad piece, I know how it feels to have lost a loved one.
Thank you again for entering .
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Terrifying
This is a scary story. I only wish the brother had gone with the younger one's instincts, which were good. I hear too many scary things on the news not to take this to heart. The random rhyme scheme is good and your story telling talents are excellent. That last line haunts me "my brother's good life." I see you are new to AP ~ glad to have you!
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i think you nailed it. great job. i felt like i was ambling along in the dark..hands outstretched..finding my way in this piece..and it rewarded me..with surprise..and emotion stirred from someplace hidden..
nice work! and welcome to AP !!!
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