Your blush has dropped my Mountain's sun behind
this kiss of Silhouette’s remembered hill
to melt my stream, so season might remind,
to lift the veil of night, and Winter's chill
in bluer words, so light might bare your skin
as softer stars of eyes, to flame in lash,
Adventure's touch to taste when lips begin
the wetter web of Souls to spin in ash.
For we are arms entangled to receive
those promises of tongue to tell in dove,
when feathers fly, to send what we believe
as heralds singing Summer songs above.
So lay with me in dream of grass to touch,
our wind to savor soul, in finding such.
Author notes
This is a Shakespearean sonnet
A contest entry
- Love Love Love.........Unique Love Poems Only by poet2angels.
500 points, ended January 30, 2007, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The perfect poem by xandercheerios.
800 points, ended March 3, 2007, 26 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love without a voice by badddgirl.
475 points, ended March 20, 2007, 10 entries
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Very Beautiful.
I have to admit I had to read it 4 times, and was wondering if you could explain the first part in words I can understand better, This poem is so softly spoken and I really enjoyed reading it.
Thank you.
Your blush has dropped my Mountain's sun behind
this kiss of Silhouette’s remembered hill
to melt my stream, so season might remind,
to lift the veil of night, and Winter's chill
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Beautiful
Beautifully written, filled with imagery and emotion. You certainly deserved the gold trophy! My favorite verse is the first...especially the last two lines of the first verse....."to lift the veil of night and winter's chill". My gosh, how lovely! Just awesome! -
Wow, after all that... gold for you! Good job, and thx for entering my contest! It was a hard judging... but your poem was clearly the most according to my rules and req's!
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Ah, very nice use of alliteration, "the wetter web of souls to spin". I see that's a sonnet, but I thouht a shakesperean sonnet consisted of three quatrains with ABBA rhyme schemes...lemme go check. Nope, you're right. Very well done! You should write an italian sonnet (8 lines abbaabba, then 6 lines cdcdcd, I think) I love experimenting with different sonnet styles. AH, more great alliteration, "singing Summer songs" SO AWESOME.
Very well done, glad to see this poem in my contest, and good luck!
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Gorgeous Sonnet!
This was as rich in image and mood as it was on the tongue when read aloud. I'm glad I found it here as it is just the right fit for this.
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"when feathers fly, to send what we believe
as heralds singing Summer songs of love."
Sighhh...I love this poem, Rich. It's completely beautiful, thoroughly alive with your Spirit. Gorgeous penning, Sweetie...Good luck in Lynda's contest, Sweet Scribe...
Wanda
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Such a beautiful and breathtaking piece here....such a well crafted sonnett....so perfectly written....keep up the awesome work...smiles, Terry
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You can write nature, love, spirituality, well anything in any form or style, Rich and it would always be magical and beautiful. And as always you weave nature and love together to create a masterpiece that fall so softly on the ears and just pull us along on the gentle breezes of your words. Beautiful, elegant, romantic...soft and gentle this is...like a sigh from the heart...
~ Nicolette
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beautiful Sonnet
Rich, How could I not recognize your words and beautiful entwining of lve and nature in this beautiful Sonnet....
Wow....I am always impressed with your poetry and this one leaves me in a sigh~
Lovely!
Lynda
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beautiful
very nicely done
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