Every day she stood there weeping
Waiting for her lover
And all the days they passed in vain
For his fate, it was another
And all the days they passed in vain
And heartache only grows
While all the years pass with tears
And the wind she blows
While all the years pass with tears
Her lover returns no more
Alas! He lies dead in foreign seas
To return never more
Alas! He lies dead in foreign seas
Her waiting his in vain
All of her heartache has been for not
All her tears and pain
All of her heartache has been for not
For he’ll not be back again
For though every day she stand and weeps
Her waiting is in vain
And the sea goes out and the see goes in
And the sea goes out again
But through all of the years, and all of the tears
Love goes on in spite of pain
By Analexii (A.K.A. Cassidy R. Scaglione)
Author notes
Yes yes yes! yet another depressing love poem from me! I know! You're all shocked!
A contest entry
- I want a new favie! (now allowing prewrites) by KarmasBlessing.
330 points, ended January 24, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Move Me To Tears by nays-lil-boat.
500 points, ended January 31, 2007, 9 entries
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300 points, ended June 20, 2007, 19 entries
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wonderful poem loved it. good luck in my contest
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The last stanza is definently the best. I think the first stanza was the weakest because the rhyme of "love" and "dove" is so overused.
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And AGES after the comment was made (the comment: The last stanza is definently the best. I think the first stanza was the weakest because the rhyme of "love" and "dove" is so overused) I have actually ammended it. Thanks for the tip and sorry it took so long to get back to you.
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aw, i personally like the repeated lines , this is a depressing subject, to wait for something that will never come, especially a lover.
the sorrow in that is able to kill
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well, it was a great write. i kinda liked the whole using the third line in the stanza before in the stanza after (u know what i mean), but it got... idk... alittle old i guess is the word. and this is strictly a personal preference, so you dont have to take it seriously at all, but i hate it when people rhyme again with words like pain and gain. i say it like it should rhyme with in or skin, so it always throws me off. overall, u did a good job, and i liked the subject.
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