gold fish
swims in circles
endlessly turning laps
kitty cat smiles licking her lips
hypnotized hungry eyes craving sushi
growling noise startles the kitty
but its just her tummy
still hungry for
gold fish
Author notes
Inspired by a "mystic storm"
A contest entry
- Flaunt Your Form- by deadcolor dreams.
600 points, ended February 23, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Technically perfect, and very enjoyable!
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LOl Oh this is cute, I like the vision of the goldfish and the kitty! And your rictameter makes such a lovely goldfish bowl shape too! I really liked this, good luck in the contest!
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LOL!!! Great form and write. Glad the picture inspired something good. I wrote my first rictameter a few days ago. Have to say it was not the easiest write I have ever done.
You make it look easy! Nice word choice and flow.
Well done!
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Thank you for the inspiration mysticstorm.
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