Along the way,
Something went wrong.
We're sure not still what,
And now all we have is this song.
I'm taken,
That much is true,
But you are the only one for me,
Forever and always.
Come home once more,
And lay in my arms.
We could watch the sunset,
And the stars twinkle overhead.
Their eyes are cold,
Just as yours were,
As you spoke those final words,
To send shivers through my spine.
Nothing is right,
Nothing makes sense.
Not you, nor, I, nor this.
I could've sworn we were heaven sent.
Come home once more,
And maybe I will get some sleep
Dear Love,
[[I miss you terribly]]
Author notes
LoaA
A contest entry
- Inspired by Lips of an Angel by Blue Eyed and Alive.
450 points, ended January 22, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Solid write. Some of it comes across as a little off. "We're sure not still what" and "And maybe I will get some sleep" both feel a bit forced. However, my favorite part is: Nothing is right,
Nothing makes sense.
Not you, nor, I, nor this.
I could've sworn we were heaven sent
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