There once was a girl with no name,
a girl of the forest was she,
she had no parents to keep her tame,
nor human had she to see.
she liked to travel long ways,
through distant lands fraught with crescent shaped bays
she had no language
nor need for money
for she was among the feys
across the river, through wind and sleet
through hurricanes and tornadoes which sweep away feet
via mountain passes, she outclasses
where all would concede they were beat
she grew up in the wild, she learnt of the flowers,
of juniper, lilac and roots with great powers
and suddenly just when the world seemed allright
along came a man, and away she took flight
for never had she in all the years of her life
seen anything quite like a full grown great knight.
The knight was surprised, for never had he
seen a maiden as fair and beautiful as she
he resolved to find her,
marry and bride her
not knowing she hid up a tree.
she watched as he searched far and wide,
his love might have turned back the tide,
but she knew this not
how she made him hot
but with eldritch majic he fried.
Author notes
I feel the end kind of satires the old idea of the girl being caught and either falling in love or simply being married against her will.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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dude...nice poem... Unlike the others...I care nothing for rhythme or rhyme, because it's the context that's important to me....(just look at any of my poems...lol)
But enjoyed the idea. ^_^
"There once was a girl with no name,
a girl of the forest was she,
she had no parents to keep her tame,
nor human had she to see.
she liked to travel long ways,
through distant lands fraught with crescent shaped bays
she had no language
nor need for money
for she was among the feys"
Two parts of many that I like....ah the privation...^_^ I dunno...I love the idea behind it, privation always makes for a good story. Which is one reason I ever write or draw...the plot is important...but the language is also important...and well expressed the scenery and way of living well....
(terrible sentence structure of mine...lol...)
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Hmm...nice poem but has a few flaws in it, not every line rhyms but apert from that the imagery is great.
Well done though like it....
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Brilliantly well written! Interesting flow and rhyming scheme, there are a few discrepencies in the rhythm but they are not that notice able.
Beautiful conjuring of the imagery, with a powerful story!
Keep writing!
~SL~
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