Beauty emanates when you're near
Hushed silence sighs contentedly.
Two souls to ardor do adhere
Beauty emanates when you're near.
Hearts beat as one and do appear
To flow like streams so steadily.
Beauty emanates when you're near
Hushed silence sighs contentedly.
Author notes
A triolet
In a list
A contest entry
- Flaunt Your Form- by deadcolor dreams.
600 points, ended February 23, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Technically perfect.
Great job, and good luck!
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A really lovely triolet here. I'm not as familiar with various forms as I should be, but I can still appreciate talent, and this is a fantastic poem. Good luck with the contest.
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A very pretty and loving triolet. Good luck.
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very good
i liked the poam very much -
Gorgeous work. So short, and so sweet. Great job.
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Fabulous
This is totally magnificent!! Small and powerful! It's great poetry. Love these lines -
Two souls to ardor do adhere
Hearts beat as one and do appear
When 2 hearts are meant to be beating for one another, unequivocably, they will beat together. It's the law of the universe and God. Love and blessings xx
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Good work
The note values of the words here blend and roll beautifully
great job in this form
~~Starr~~ xx -
you are so good at this form poetry, your words are like music to the ears, there is beauty in every line and so much emotion, well done, Broad
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very nice...I do love the form...this inspires me to maybe try it out...you write so beautifully ...it is a pleasure to read ur work...thank u
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Lovely piece filled with wonderful vocab so much said in such few words well done with this
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Bravo!
An excellent and superbly executed triolet! I loved it! Absolutely loved it! Bravo! Bravo! bravo!
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ah the triolet, a great form for expressing love. i wish that you have good luck in this contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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A different form than I've seen before, yet lends itself nicely to the image you're conjuring with your words. Thank you for sharing it - good luck in the contest.
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Very nice!
Good writing.
I'm assuming you wrote that for a girl.
She must be quite chuffed.
A triolet? Its a beautiful sounding word.
I like this line,
"To flow like streams so steadily."
Keep it up!
Kind regards
Previn -
wow this is a really beautiful and sweet piece it obviously came from the heart. keep on writing as you are a good writer and i would love to read many more of your pieces. and it is short and sweet at the same time. from tash.
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Lovely
A most beautiful love poem etched upon this website. Dear poet your heart is in this work and this offers an insight into the underlying humanity and beauty of your poetic soul. Enticed we are by your artiscially thought out opening line... "Beauty eminates when you're near"... To think of Beauty EMINATING from a person.. its got nothing to do with a persons looks but who they are.. its who that person is that attracted you to her and made you write this inspiring poem. To repeat this three times almost like a chant.. is something that could get really deep into your soul into your mind.. "Is this really what he thinks of her?" It is such a beautiful thought, it truly is. Clearly a lot of thought has gone into this poem though it is short. Sometimes more thought needs to go into the shorter ones because you need to say something big using less words, and my friend you have done that beautifully. -
beauty clad in love is enough to attract attention like your poem...nice poem
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