Say:
Would you peer
beyond the walls
of your urban shame
and look for the
piece that scribes
my heart,
sing with the echos
of distant voices
from beneath the
yellow facade into
memories that aren't
yours,
walk along trails of
people forgotten,
more than dusty paths
and obsessions that
fade with your grey
footprints;
find me as a stranger
and allow the walls
to die- maybe then
you would find that
last piece I'm
looking for.
Author notes
[Option 1 for KinDling's contest]
[Option 1: Stairs to nowhere // and "I have feelings too you know...Just because I act like stone doesn't mean I am stone" for BarbedWireButterly's contest]
Nothing new.
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Another poem that has quite some potential, but again I failed to see where it fits the winter theme of this contest...
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GREAT! I love the constant enjambment in this poem. It makes for a wonderful, fast-paced read that grips the reader until the very end. The images are expressive and clear and the words are well done. You do a wonderful job and explaining your theme and you did this entire poem and contest with justice. Very excellent job and best of luck! Thank you for entering.
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very nice. the emotion is excellent. THANKYOU FOR PUTTIN DA OPTION! u've got no idea how much I appreciate it! love the use of emotion and the stanzas, good job and good luck. thnx for enterin
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I really like this- the descriptions and relations to inatimate objects in areas are wonderfully written. Thank you so much for entering and good luck!
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Very Enjoyable
I really enjoyed reading this mainly because of your choice of words. Words are a beautiful thing, and you use them beautifully. You weaved them together here to make such a wonderful piece. Thank you for entering, and best of luck to you. -
Very dark and vivid. You had a nice flow in this piece, and some good imagery. I enjoyed reading, and thankyou for entering my contest.
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