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P.e.a.c.e. and ALOHA

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PEACE
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Peace   - End, Aim - Chance Ever
Extraordinary As Choice Enables Prosperity
Authentic Creativity Empowerment Proven Expansion,
Convergence Everywhere Prepares Expression Active
Essential Potential Enlightenment Awareness Clear



ALOHA
Acceptance Love Open Harmony Always

Love Open Harmony Always Acceptance

Open Harmony Always Acceptance Love

Harmony Always Acceptance Love Open

Always Acceptance Love Open Harmony

Author notes

End Abuse and Hate Contest Option 1 & 8 PEACE

This is a circular acrostic
The first letter of the second line is continued to the right repeating in order PEACE EACEP ACEPE CEPEA EPEAC rolling round to awareness clear

Each line may be read horizontally, vertically and diagonally

Enjoy !

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Comments

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  • celadia gold member
    August 11
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    It's colorful.

  • Shya
    July 31

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    This was fun to read. The colors and pictures are so friendly, and the words were so peaceful. The only thing I would say is that some of the words and phrases don't seem to make sense. For example, I don't understand the line "Essential Potential Enlightenment Awareness Clear". Thank you for entering, and may peace be brought to all!

    • Jonathan ROBIN gold member
      July 31
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      Reel Acrostic

      As mentionned in the notes this is a reel acrostic where as in the second PEACE version each line may be read in normal sequence, vertically and diagonally with minor punctuation differences

      Also each words beginning with each letter form a coherent sentence as in
      Peace Prosperity Proven Prepares Potential
      or
      Potential Prepares Proven Prosperity Peace

      Chance Choice Creativity Convergence Clear
      Clear Convergence Creativity Choice Chance


  • maralisa gold member
    July 1

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    absolutly fantastic loved evry word and design good luck in the contest peaceis within us all and brings perfect harmony to all but only if we are at peace within ourselfs can we understand this thank you for entering the contest and good luck in the contest

    . Rewarded 6


  • PhantomsAngel87 Greeters member
    June 30

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    Wow.
    I was drawn in by your pictures, moved by your words and taught by your poetry form ... I have never heard of a circular acrostic before but very much like it

    A wonderful write!
    ♥
    Thank you for your entry in Tolerance Contest & Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda

  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 27

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    You quote Baudelaire, 'Ceux qui savent me devinent, et pour ceux qui ne peuvent ou qui ne veulent pas comprendre, j'amoncellerais sans fruit les explications.' But this is all explications, from the colour of the fonts to the author's notes! Having said that it, it is a fine "etude", kinda like the Art of the Fugue in miniature. You said "Enjoy" and so that's what I did.


  • Rose of Ireland gold member
    September 16, 2007

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    Awesome!!!

    I love your profound thought-process!!!


  • ebaby
    August 22, 2007
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    very nice...


  • Child of Water
    February 7, 2007

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    i found it a little tedious to read, but then again i hardly ever break from my free flow mode. I give your kudos for trying this out as well as the for the promotion of well being.
    Best wishes

  • Moonlit-Reveries
    February 2, 2007
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    This is an incredibly clever form and I've never read quite like this. Yet within this tight clever form you were able still convey a powerful message about peace. It has a slightly different meaning in each direction.

    Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck.

  • DizzyLizzy
    January 21, 2007
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    ALOHA

    Acceptance Love Open Harmony Always

    More dischord than harmony! And acceptance only comes with wisdom! Love, well that is conditional. Open, so long as it's not too painful - ALWAYS for ever is a long time.

    Aloha Jonathan
    x


  • Iohagh
    January 19, 2007

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    Very bright I think...

    Darling

    I love peace activities
    fighting for basic health
    saving children from slavery
    not by redistributing wealth.

    Smoosh

    Janet


  • W B Burkholder
    January 19, 2007

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    very different indeed, i dont think i have ever seen this form before, but well done, verey interesting and it gets the mind pumping, well done

  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    January 19, 2007

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    This is a very interesting write. Something that I will have to try sometime. Aloha and Mahalo for sharing it!


    Jeremy0826


  • April Renee
    January 19, 2007

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    original. very nice. i like it. the formatting of it could be very meaningful as well. like saying peace has its limits but aloha, or hello im guessing, is constant unchanged. perhaps if peace came second it would work itself out using the freedom of hello. or something other. i dont really know if that made sense.

    but nice job with this. enjoyed the read.

    blu


    • Jonathan ROBIN gold member
      January 19, 2007
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      AP formatting

      I would agree with you but perhaps the comment should be addressed to Kevin who admits that there are not only problems with "normal" formatting but also rich text formatting on AP

      This may give an insight into what has been formatted and remains possible within English poetical tradition framework while introducing palindromes and acrostics within the text ... other examples may be found on my author's page ...

      Able Remeasured Sonnet

      http://allpoetry.com/poem/2489619

      Enjoy !


      • April Renee
        January 19, 2007
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        hmmmm..i completely missing the format boat with my comment. which is probably why your reply comment and link was extremely confusing. lol. ah well. sorry.

        good stuff though.

        blu

  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    January 19, 2007

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    Perching percarisously, pondering
    eternal eviction...emerges exposition
    an animated aria arrives
    carefully composed, crackling cautiously ...
    even ears edge expectantly

  • waydownuponjoy
    January 19, 2007

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    fun stuff ...

    I must say that your imagination to challenge yourself seems to be the first thing that I think of after reading your peace poem. As for the poem itself, I think that it would be great to see it laid out so you could present it in the manner that you had in mind after you worked out all of the details of word choice. As for the message ... you won't get an arguemnt from me and I should add that for some the desire runs deep, I'm sure! joy


  • Providence
    January 18, 2007
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    Marvelous! Peace happens You delight-filled word play is testimant to that! I have my own musings on
    P E A C E
    Check out my "motto" on my authors page!

    Your are very talented!

    Namaste!
    Marianne

  • Poetic Aphrodite
    January 18, 2007

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    This is the first I have seen of this type of acrostic, and I must say you have excelled at it, very creatively put together indeed, Bella

  • Topaz
    January 18, 2007
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    Word Play Puzzles

    You make acrostics look like fun word play. Very nice poem. Like the subject matter of PEACE.


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    January 18, 2007

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    This is my first read of an acrostic done this way and it is very clever and intelligently worked out with great words to empower Peace this way. Exellent job.


  • alco
    January 18, 2007

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    WOW!

    you did an amazing job on this acrostic, i've never done one like this before. it took alot of creativity on your part to do this! all i can say is wow. you are good. i just sit in amazement as i read it over and over. i'm glad you put to read the notes. NEAT!-my first read of yours and i am impressed! monica


  • semperfimom39 gold member
    January 18, 2007

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    Awesome!

    Wow! That is so cool!! I can only hope to learn how to do that soon. Thanks for the explanation on how that works and look forward to seeing some more! Semperfimom39


  • ennovy silver member
    January 18, 2007
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    Clever Pattern and a Great Form

    I sat and read this in every way I could imaginable. You have done an excellent job on this read. I found the word peace starting with the first letter of the words about 15 times...write on!...novy


  • ChildeOfChaos
    January 17, 2007

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    Wow, this is really neat. This is actually the first times I've ever read a poem of this type and I really like it. Nice work.

  • Marissa Ann Scott
    January 17, 2007

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    :)

    I loved this! A friend of mine has an obsession with acrostics. I will refer this page to him. I love the roll-around pattern you used. It is always wonderful when a poet can use form to enhance meaning in thier poem. Some people use form just because they're addicted to a particular for or have mastered it. You used form here as a tool. And I believe that that is how form should be used.

    Loved your diction as well. It is always refreshing to read the work of a poet who uses more than 2 syllable words in thier work.

    Question: Why did you use dashes here? (I'm curious)
    "P eace -- End, Aim -- Chance"

    P.S. Thank you for your suggestions on my latest poem. Suggestions are so welcome right now. I have started back writing after a considerable spell of not writing so I'm a tad rusty.


  • Sagergirl
    January 17, 2007

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    This was a very clever write. You did an excellent job with this form of poetry. This must've taken you some time to come up with. Excellent!!

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