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Reflect the storm (Minute Poetry) ©

A question sent upon the storm,
roams with no form,
words cannot ease,
yet still release.

Now from this ash I must conceive,
plot my retrieve,
the greys of hate,
will not relate.

A gesture made, reclaims my mind,
truth is refined,
a gentle heart,
will soon restart.

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  • Wandika gold member
    January 19, 2007

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    I agree, an old wound is healing and it is with caution that you now extend yourself forward to again "test the water". Be not fearful my friend. Though it is not always how we want it, it is always worth the effort and the wait.


    • EyeRaven
      January 20, 2007
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      Thank you

      I am seriously thinking to talk your piece of advice, and am gradually getting rid of the hurt and fear.
      Thanks again,
      Be well,
      RD.


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    January 17, 2007

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    Very deep Raven and as always written with thought. it's as though an old festering wound has healed its self with the truth in the matter.
    last verse was lovely.
    You are the man my friend, you can turn your pen to anything.
    Good luck in the contest.
    Slán Dolores. x


    • EyeRaven
      January 18, 2007
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      Thank you

      Again you shower me with graious words,
      I can only thank you deeply..fearing it won't be enough.

      Be well,
      RD.


  • vampire of thought
    January 17, 2007

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    me like...*claps* u rock, man. awesome poetry, as usual...*bows to a master*


    • EyeRaven
      January 18, 2007
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      Lol

      Please don't..
      I am no master..

      How have you been ?

      Peace,
      RD.


  • Fall.Of.Rome
    January 17, 2007
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    Simple...but effective. It's not bad at all, I rather enjoyed this one. Thank you and good luck


  • rhondasail
    January 16, 2007

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    Softer than what I've become used to seeing from you. I like very much the flow here. And the positive end line "a gentle heart, will soon restart." Definitely surprised me. Simple text with an easy rhythm. What a talent you are, Raven. I have to ask, what is the question sent upon the storm? And what is conceived? Smooth read. Makes me thoughful.


  • NickN
    January 16, 2007

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    I like the rhyming scheme that you used with the 8, 4, 4, 4 beat. Very effective and keeps the reader intangled in the words and thoughts of the poem. Good luck in the contest.

    -Nick

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