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I love to step heavily


I love to step heavily

on empty concrete

But this concrete is not empty

So I thud

thud

thud

sadly a top of orange peels

juice lids

and blotches of black paint.


Look out the window Christopher

something there will be different.

five minutes ago it was merely snow falling

but this time there will be blue



falls of serene water


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  • Suzanne Dia
    May 9, 2007

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    nice...i like tripping from one mood to the other by simply looking out of the window.

    beautiful.


  • swimsuit issue
    February 11, 2007
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    this is simply gorgeous.


  • mad hattie
    February 7, 2007

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    what a jewel!
    love the perceptions expressed
    the imagining gives way to
    anticipation.
    Like it lots.

    one love
    Justine


  • Goodolenad
    January 17, 2007
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    i imagine you as having a very confident gait...seing as how you love to step heavily.

    i do love the last few lines, they sound so sweet.

    awesome write, like always. i simply adore how you write.