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Like A Candle

AS THE DARKNESS SETS IN, AND HOPE FADES AWAY
THE SADNESS CREEPS IN, AND LONELINESS STAYS
MY BREATH EXHALES, AND A SIGH ESCAPES
I CRY IN THE SHADOWS, TEARS OF MISERY
I LAMENT IN MY LOSS, SELF-PITY TO THE LOST
THE END TEASES ME, AS I PICTURE MY TROPHY
MY WIFE, MY LIFE, MY ONE, MY LOVE
WAITS FOR ME AS I RACE FOR HER
SHE LIGHTS THE WAY, UNWAVERING, AND HOPE IS REGAINED

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  • Desire gold member
    January 16, 2007
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    Oy-

    Wow-
    The capitals really adds the emphasis to an already
    powerful verse You have penned
    I wish You much Happiness and Thank You for sharing
    Your Thoughts within this piece~
    Emotion packed~

    Many blessings to You
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Sagergirl
    January 16, 2007
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    This was very beautiful. I liked the way you gave hope at the end by way of your wife. Making her the candle in the darkness. Excellent rhythm and rhyme in this poem. It was a smooth and easy read. Great job!!