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You are a Puzzlement

I've lost more sense than recieved answers
in place of warring minds settle lovely lips
and grace has sewn my freedom straight
but we are not acting from lack of sober blood
there are just too many pieces.

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  • The Burning Year
    January 21, 2007

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    yes

    I would love to sit down and have a long talk with you...it seems like it would be fun..because this shows beauty and knowledge I love the line

    "but we are not acting from lack of sober blood"

    It seems like I could see it in a play or something..it realy held a strong meaning and brought the poem to its end well...I enjoyed this


  • RyanLong
    January 20, 2007
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    This is a well-written poem. I had to read it a couple times a to get a grasp on it, and I'd be lying if I said I completely understand. But that's the beauty of this, it leaves the poem open to the readers interpretation. Great job.


  • lucy sky-diamond
    January 17, 2007

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    a short but powerful piece, one i enjoyed reading very much. i like the message inside it. keep up the great work


  • Lj-
    January 16, 2007
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    Another awesome write, keep it up!