A puddle of tears in the middle of a wooden floor
Seeping though the crack and the nails begin to rust
The thought of a death destroys my mind
The memories I'm about to soon leave behind
No death is here
Just long lost thoughts of friends and a place I used to know
A picture is all I have left
For that place is gone
Lost in time
Stuck in my memory
Sinking beneath my skin
Destroying my heart
Cutting me thin
I'm a strand
A strand of thin wire
Lost in a mass of beginning and endings
Soon to be cut and left behind
I'm sorry world for every thing I've done
I'm sorry are the words always put in a letter
Why can't people say anything else besides it's not your fault
but all I have to say is I miss my life
I miss my family
I regret that dreadful mistake I made in that room
I wish I could pick me up off the walls and sew me back together
but I can't
Good bye world
If you want me back
Sit in a circle and chant
Chant about my looks
Chant about bringing me back
or Chant just to chant
but remember if you want to bring me back
You can't
Author notes
eh... life is harsh
Written June 3rd, 2003
A contest entry
- Your best prewrite by glazecovered.
300 points, ended February 23, 2004, 274 entries
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I really enjoyed the poem together it worked so well. I think you have captured the art of imagery and intensity. Keep up the good work I really enjoyed it. This was a very sad poem all the way through but the ending left with impact and I am a big fan of impact. well good job and good luck.
Shine brighter,
Baby Star -
Ah, I loved the imagery, very vivid, and it makes your poem so much stronger. The ending gave me this powerful feeling of helplessness and inevitability. Very sad. Great job in expressing yourself through poetry. Thank you for entering and good luck.
~Anastasia -
"A strand of thin wire
Lost in a mass of beginning and endings"
Filled with such sorrow, it pours like tears shed down the page.
Good luck in the contest my friend, and I hope that happiness has found your heart.
~Ody~ -
I like this, it is sad. Makes me wonder what happened even though it's not my business. I really liked this the visual I got from this was one of a sad girl. I hope you feel better.
~*Flawed Destiny*~ -
terrific
i like it but its so sad!!! Cheer up...life goes on. que sara sara (im a spanish addict heehee) what will be will be. just live your life out and you'll get great things.
loved the write. keep it up. and dont be sad!
*cHiCa MeGAn* -
Really nice, I love it. Nicely written and keep at it!
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fabulous write!!!
oh, isn't life just the GRANDEST thing?????? BloodFlame is right on this one, it does get better. i dunno wuts got u down so, and i dunno if i've been were u are, but i know wut its like to feel like nuthing's going rite in your life and ur just sick of it. just wait around, and it will get better soon..........
keep your spirits up!!!
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This is good.It was really touching.I love your stufff. -
Great
Loved it! i know how you feel.. you will get through it though... if you want to.... remember.. your life is in your hands and only yours... but you can make the decision to keep on going... oh.. and it does get better :).. i know.. but overall this was a really good write and i enjoyed it very much!
Keep it up
~BloodFlame -
razor blades, alcohol, blood filled bathtub ;
awww....Kaylie's little poodle wrote a fantastic poem! so sad and yet very cool. me like. -idiot grin- love ya lots.
-paige-
-tackles you and gives you a big hug so you cant breathe-
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