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Wake ! though the West still fitfully counts sheep,
the East’s ablaze, there will wise rays rise steep
from far horizon, phasing stars away
phrased out by Robin Jay and sparrow’s cheep.

A bird soft sings – one robin is enough –
to sway ten trillion stars as ball of fluff
art scored by millions more – cheep’s cheek astounds,
rebounding echoes which their shyness slough.

Earth lends thereto both orbit, ear, - at ease
tunes into echo surfing on the breeze,
Life’s warmth wells from flat fields and rocky tors,
gold bees abound, they buzz as kittens sneeze.

Eternal silence sleep prevents, world waits
on spider spinning, dawn anticipates,
while we may ask what sense is made of sound
by church and steeple, aisle and green stile gates.

What feelings hound retains for hare he’d chase
and what the hunted for the hound  ? What pace
finds interest g[r]o[w] when it is mind compound ?
What’s real to roundabout when rests its case ?

How feels the Tao for circling day and night ?
what for the centre feels surround, dark, light ?
what of the bounce when words once more rebound
describing robin breasting air in flight ?

What feels for fractal any given point ?
What feels the oil for King who rites anoint ?
What feels for tree the Autumn leaf once browned ?
Both throne and leaf soon tumble out of joint.

What reads the clearing into red deer’s [t]race ?
May star count light years till return to base ?
How may red blood react to heart’s flesh pound
when foreign smokescreen floats round beauty’s face ?

Stars seek love’s meaning, spinning hot and cold
on Cause, Effect foretold as orbits fold
around their half-life cycles and around
on ‘always’ as they fight the black hole’s hold.

Bird song still seeks its Way upon Time's wave,
stars spin off Mankind’s blind, ambitious crave, -
cross star-crossed dream, by mortal sadness bound,
crowned deathbound by a gaping open grave.

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Crowned deathbound by a gaping open grave,
cross star-crossed dream, by mortal sadness bound,
stars spin off Mankind’s blind, ambitious crave -
bird song still seeks its Way upon Time's wave.

On ‘always’ as they fight the black hole’s hold
around their half-life cycles and around
on Cause, Effect foretold as orbits fold,
stars seek love’s meaning, spinning hot and cold.

When foreign smokescreen floats round beauty’s face ?
how may red blood react to heart’s flesh pound
may star count light years till return to base ?
what reads the clearing into red deer’s [t]race ?

Both throne and leaf soon tumble out of joint.
What feels for tree the Autumn leaf once browned ?
What feels the oil for King who rites anoint ?
What feels for fractal any given point ?

Describing robin breasting air in flight
what of the bounce when words once more rebound ?
What for the centre feels surround, dark, light ?
how feels the Tao for circling day and night ?

What’s real to roundabout when rests its case,
finds interest g[r]o[w] when it is mind compound ?
and what the hunted for the hound ? What pace
What feelings hound retains for hare he’d chase

By church and steeple, aisle and green stile gates.
while we may ask what sense is made of sound
on spider spinning, dawn anticipates,
eternal silence sleep prevents, world waits …

Gold bees abound, they buzz as kittens sneeze,
Life’s warmth wells from flat fields and rocky tors,
tunes into echo surfing on the breeze,
Earth lends thereto both orbit, ear, - at ease.

Rebounding echoes which their shyness slough.
art scored by millions more – cheep’s cheek astounds,
to sway ten trillion stars as ball of fluff -
a bird soft sings – one robin is enough.

Phrased out by Robin Jay and sparrow’s cheep.
from far horizon, phasing stars away
the East’s ablaze, there will wise rays rise steep
Wake ! though the West still fitfully counts sheep.

Author notes

n.b. adapted from my orignal Rubaiyat of a Robin to key into the reverse mirror form
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2390553

Pic and Background Anu Fleur de Lys
http://www.flickr.com/photos/anua22a/2723834286/

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  • Xqzt
    August 3

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    Blissful

    A beautiful awakening. Good luck with this. Certainly the image and the poem meld as one. Thanks. I leave with euphoric blissfulness as the words imbue my synapses and celebrate joyfully. Anu

    . Rewarded 4


  • Pamela A Lamppa gold member
    January 27, 2007
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    Wow - So Filled with Thought

    Wow. This piece is quite profound. I had to read it several times to truly take everything in, and still, I am not certain I have got it all. A brilliant effort and coordination of rhyme for this form. Best of luck in this contest. ~Pam


  • Wandika gold member
    January 25, 2007

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    Interesting

    I had to read multiple times. You have put a lot of thought into this poem. Good luck in the contest. Liked the aaba rhyme scheme.

    Jim


  • maa gold member
    January 22, 2007

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    contest update

    dear poet,
    the contest has been extended for a few days, and I have added a few updates ... if you don't mind checking, you will see that there is the possibility now to enter 2 poems per poet, which may allow those who like to play with the form, to enter a poem with an alternative rhyme-scheme, meter or/and subject ...

    maa

  • maa gold member
    January 22, 2007

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    stunning

    I had to read your poem several times, and am sure that I haven't integrated all its beauty and inherent wisdom yet ... although what strikes me most each time I read it, are those following lines :

    What feels for tree the Autumn leaf once browned?
    What feels the oil for King who rites anoint?
    What feels for fractal any given point?

    What for the centre feels surround, dark, light ?
    how feels the Tao for circling day and night ?

    your poem is what I would call a poem with highly transformative powers for the reader ... it doesn't leave one indifferent, that's for sure ...

    as for the form, I enjoyed the aaba-rhyme-scheme and the iambic pentameter with slight, but charming variations ... most probably used with intention ...

    all together, a piece I will reread many more times ...


    maa

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