Beneath brown rolls of flesh:
I am
the sweetened nectar of flowers
full-bloomed,
prettily concealed
my darkened flesh
the core of fruitful Earth
My flesh
the scatters of cosmos soils
a nymphet's playground my flowing arms;
the smoothened plains layers of my skin;
my breasts the heated treasures beneath ocean ridges
my eyes - your vision of exotica
my legs - the autobahn of grounds
And you were:
the crystallized gem
nurtured years after years
:the molten birth of life on my land
Until:
I was wrapped in your poison vineyard's maze
struggling between chemicals and corruptions
of larvae, or humans' ugliness
Author notes
Inspired by Nicolette's From Eve Diary, and I feel like rolling into soils despite the melted snow today.
I suppose I am describing Gaia metaphorically, in the sense that she is the Earth. I suppose I wrote about her, for her interesting crossover with a Goddess's powers, and yet relation to the mortal world. Perhaps I was trying to criticize society implicitly with this piece. Hope I am doing this right!
A contest entry
- Gods & Heroes by Lone Defender.
600 points, ended February 13, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beatiful poem. I love the metaphors you use. Intersting piece. However you did not follow the rules. You are first to write a poem about sirens, mermaids, or elves. Then if chosen for the second round you can enter poems about gods, and goddesses. I really like your poem but I have to DQ you. However please try again.
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pretty good!
i enjoyed reading this, even though i haven't read the book it is based upon :-) now i really feel like checking it out. it was very well woven,lots of imagery, lots of passion, a great write as always...
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Great
The images your words evoked were beautiful & mystical to say the least. The love, pride of accomplishment, wrath and sadness of a mother, a goddess seep through, sinking into the reader's thoughts. Nice job
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Fluid descriptive phrases and excellent unity througout the piece. A truly impressive poem.
Thank you for entering my contest, and best of luck.
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gaia...also known as mother earth...or nature as you said...i just love the way you point out exactly what should be said with such virtuosity...
amazing job -
Beautiful, sensual images. I could see the vibrations and the pulsations of life--it actually reminded me of Wordsworth (Composed on Westminster Bridge) I think, personifying the earth. And the word "nymphet" always gets me, I think of Lolita! But I'm glad I read this one, we seem to be taking leaves out of the others books- seeing more natural poems from you!
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