Protesting against the aids virus
I fervently vow to fight
not against the victims themselves
but against what steals their lives
I vow to make a difference
to let my voice be heard
if there's only one life changed
it's worth spreading the word
stand against the dirty needles
spread the words of safe sex
deny not your love for the afflicted
for your loved one could be next
shake not your fists at the dieing
but shake at the disease that steals
hurry to inform our children
for their's a thief on societys heels
please stand at the rallys
don't be scared to hug their neck
show love to the suffering willingly
for love is all that some have left
dare not to single the victims out
leaving them in the wilderness to roam
understand what makes the disease grow
but welcome the afflicted into your home
I gained first hand experience
driving home one Friday night
approaching a fatal car accident
I tried to save someones life
I administered mouth to mouth
though his blood covered his lips
the child wanted to see his mother again
so I helped to deliver his wish
although I saved the young boys life
I contracted the deadly disease
again I ask for your voice to be heard
and turn me not away I beg please
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900 points, ended February 3, 2007, 17 entries
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WOW
Great write trying to get the world to love everyone for who they are. So sad though that people would treat others like that. Good work teaching if the tables have turned would we want to be turned away.
very touching heart felt... good job.
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amazing
Protesting against the aids virus
I fervently vow to fight
not against the victims themselves
but against what steals their lives
I vow to make a difference
to let my voice be heard
if there's only one life changed
it's worth spreading the word
excellent start of ap oem.. you are very powerful in your protest.. good for you for fighting... Kassie. -
amazing
The message you are sending here is one that is not heard often enough. The connotations and negativity associated with AIDS is often the only thing people here when they find out someone has AIDS. They often do not stop to realize that the victims of AIDS are mother, fathers, brothers, sisters and someone's children. Some do not realize that those people in society who identify as helpers are the ones that are most at risk of getting such diseases. Thank you for trying to send this message.
As I was reading your poem I felt that the last three stanzas should have been at the beginning. They seem more of an introduction to your poem rather than an ending. This is only a suggestion, it may not work for you.
Take care,
~Mystikal~
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Wow...last paragraph was pretty hard hitting. Very good poem, I like it. Good luck and thank you.
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